Talk:Statue of Elizabeth II, Lagos

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Boca Jóvenes in topic GA Review


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The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk23:08, 22 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

Created by No Swan So Fine (talk). Self-nominated at 22:01, 13 September 2021 (UTC).Reply

  •   Hi No Swan So Fine, review follows: article created 7 September and exceeds minimum length; sources look to be reliable, I can't access the ones used for the hook but happy to AGF; I found no issues with overly close paraphrasing from the sources cited; awaiting a QPQ, I've also picked out a few sentences that I think would benefit from attention:
  • "It was intended that the completed statue would sit in the Nigerian House of Representatives prior to the establishment of the Federation of Nigeria and the end of British colonial rule in 1960" - would perhaps be better not mentioning the Federation of Nigeria as that had already been established as a British protectorate in 1954.
  • "Upon its exhibition at the exhibited by him at the Royal Society of British Artists exhibition in 1957 The Times commented that the statue..." - Exhibition, exhibited, exhibition...
  • "Enwonwu also created a bust of Elizabeth to use as a scale model to help depict her subsequent pose and depiction of her regalia." - Doesn't read well for me "to help depict her ... depiction of her regalia"?
  • "The Queen subsequently commissioned to create a bust of her eldest son, Prince Charles" - missing "Enwonwu" after commissioned?
All the best - Dumelow (talk) 11:40, 16 September 2021 (UTC)Reply
Many thanks @Dumelow:, my prose looks much improved with your suggestions! No Swan So Fine (talk) 08:44, 17 September 2021 (UTC)Reply
  Hi No Swan So Fine, looking good and QPQ now completed - Dumelow (talk) 08:57, 17 September 2021 (UTC)Reply
To T:DYK/P2

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Reviewer: Boca Jóvenes (talk · contribs) 05:25, 19 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

Hello, I'll review this. Should be back in a day or two. BoJó | talk UTC 05:25, 19 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

I've read the article and it's looking okay on the whole but I'd like to spend a bit more time on it. I've made a few small additions which should help: a caption under the image and a couple of useful links. You need to reconsider the clause: "Upon its exhibition at the exhibited by him at the Royal Society of British Artists exhibition in 1957". That's all for the moment. BoJó | talk UTC 05:43, 19 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

I don't know if anyone is still interested in this but I've fixed the clause and the rest looks okay to me. It's well written, sources are fine, a good image, no issues. It is a short article but, really, I can't see how you could widen its scope so the coverage is good. I'm promoting it to WP:GA. Well done. BoJó | talk UTC 19:56, 23 September 2022 (UTC)Reply