Talk:The Legend of Zelda: Phantom Hourglass/GA1

GA Review

Ok, lets get started. The article has no edit wars, it has some images but no excess of them, it is neutral point of view, prose is ok

• Reference 33 is broken
• Wikilink all the publishers in the articles references
• There should be an image demonstrating the gameplay not just battle mode. Also, there should be a sailing image that would both demonstrates the plot and sailing which is notable since you do it so much in the game and it is different from Wind Waker.
• all images need very specific rationales as to exactly what they demonstrate and why; general descriptions like "illustrates the subject" don't work
• Make sure there is a reference next to each score in the video game score box.
• The Development section talks about development, but doesn't really say anything about what were the inspirations, or how they responded to criticisms of Windwaker and its excessive sailing and lack of dungeons. Add even more when you go for FA.
• You will probably be asked to expand the setting section, so perhaps (I just finished the game an hour ago) mention it is in a parallel world in that section.
• It is a large gameplay section, and it might be good to break it up like Final Fantasy VI does.
• The lead should have a sentence of what the actual plot is, and could even have a reference to how well the game sold (not specific numbers but generally)
• Once you do those minor fixes, copyediting and trimming will be the main task of getting this to FA, especially with the Gameplay section. Copyediting should also focus on making the text flow through paragraphs and cut down on the number of two-three sentence paragraphs.
  • all of the above are done Gary King (talk) 19:09, 4 April 2008 (UTC)

And that's my review! Message me when its complete :) Judgesurreal777 (talk) 18:49, 4 April 2008 (UTC)

Excellent job! It's passed, and with a good copyedit, it will be an extremely strong FA candidate. Congratulations! Judgesurreal777 (talk) 20:17, 4 April 2008 (UTC)