Talk:Thelma Akana Harrison/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Indy beetle (talk · contribs) 07:07, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

I'll take this one, it looks interesting. Comments:

• Lots of red links here. Not a demand on my part, but I suggest that either they are cut down or, hopefully, they turn blue in the near future.
• In January 1944,The Honolulu Advertiser reported that she was "being urged" to run for Territorial Senate as a Republican Link Republican.
• Aside from her victory, any information on her campaign worthy of inclusion? How many votes she got?
• No need to repeatedly write "David Y. K. Akana" after his first mention in the body of the article.
• Is it known where she was buried?

-Indy beetle (talk) 07:07, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

Indy beetle, thank you so much for pinking up this review!

• I've removed the redlinks which might not be notable, and if I have time in the near future I'll work on making at least a stub for each of the remaining ones.
• Linked Republican as suggested
• Added some information about her campaign, including number of votes
• Trimmed instances of "David Y. K. Akana" to "Senator Akana" after first mention in body
• I haven't been able to find a source for where she was buried, but I'll keep trying!

-- ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 22:01, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

Source spotchecks:

• "Mrs. Thelma Akana Announces Her Candidacy For Senate From Oahu". Honolulu Star-Bulletin. - All good here
• "Succeeds Husband". Hawaii Tribune-Herald. - Good
• Hill, Virginia Bennett (November 8, 1944). "Two Oahu Senate Seats Go To GOP". Hawaii Tribune-Herald. - Good

The sources seem to check out and, noting my satisfaction with the responses posted above, I'm passing the article. Good work. -Indy beetle (talk) 02:54, 5 September 2021 (UTC)