Talk:Thomas H. Branch/GA1

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Reviewer: Indy beetle (talk · contribs) 05:19, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

I'll do this one. My initial comments:

• was an African American Seventh-day Adventist missionary. Subjects are generally identified by their nationality first thing in the lede and not their ethnic group. Thus in this first sentence he should be identified as simply "American".

Removed "African" - Dumelow (talk) 06:29, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

• En-route he was detained for nine days by the British consul at Chinde, Portuguese Mozambique as he was concerned that a black missionary would cause insubordination among Africans in the colony. The second instance of "he" should be changed to "the consul" so as to avoid confusion.

Done - Dumelow (talk) 06:29, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

• The SDA agreed to withdraw Booth and Branch after the colonial government raised concerns; Branch's replacement was a white man. Why is it worthy of mention in the lede what the skin color of his replacement was? Perhaps "Branch's replacement was more politically acceptable to the colonial administration."

Done - Dumelow (talk) 06:29, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

• where he lived out his final years with his daughter Mabel. His daughter's name probably does not need mention in the lede.

Removed name - Dumelow (talk) 06:29, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

• Any idea what his middle name was?

I've had another look but unfortunately can't find any mention of it - Dumelow (talk) 06:49, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

• Thomas H. Branch was born in December 24, 1856, in Jefferson County, Missouri; his parents were both slaves. Link Jefferson County, and also per WP:Global attach "United States" onto that geographic location. Not all of our readers are going to know where Jefferson County, Missouri is.

Done - Dumelow (talk) 06:29, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

• Is it clear whether Branch himself was briefly a slave?

Checked the source and no, he was born free (is that the right term?). Amended article - Dumelow (talk) 06:33, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

• Branch, who was considered old for a missionary posting, had been recommended for the mission by the church's Colorado Conference Considered old by who?

Changed to more closely follow source wording - Dumelow (talk) 06:49, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

• The conference provided financial support to the mission, which was the church's first in the Protectorate. The "church" meaning the entire SDA?

Yep, clarified - Dumelow (talk) 06:33, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

• Upon arrival at Chinde Branch was detained for nine days by the British consul. Does "detained" mean he was formally arrested, or simply blocked from legally entering the protectorate?

Not sure, source just states "detained nine days by the British consul". I suspect the latter - Dumelow (talk) 06:29, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

• Branch picked up the local language and was well liked by his congregation What local language, Chewa? Also, I'd be hesitiant to include the claim that he was well-liked by his congregation if that claim is sourced to an SDA publication.

The source doesn't clarify. Both this and the well liked claim come from the Historical Dictionary of Malawi, but it probably doesn't add much and I am happy to remove it if desired - Dumelow (talk) 06:49, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

If it's sourced to the HD of Malawi its fine by me.

-Indy beetle (talk) 05:19, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

Hi Indy beetle, thanks so much for reviewing this, much appreciated. I've tried to address your comments above - Dumelow (talk) 06:49, 10 August 2021 (UTC)

• Branch moved to Watts, California as a preacher before the SDA church reluctantly approved a pension for him Any reasons given for the SDA's reluctance?

The source (Williams) says only: "He served in Watts for a short time but then took sustentation, which the new leaders from East Pennsylvania Conference were reluctant to recommend for him​." I've tried to expand on this in the article - Dumelow (talk) 10:09, 11 August 2021 (UTC)

• Does the Williams source have page numbers or a chapter?

Looks good, I will pass the article. -Indy beetle (talk) 20:56, 11 August 2021 (UTC)