Talk:Tonga at the 2000 Summer Olympics

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will review this article shortly. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

Lead

• "The Tongan delegation to these Olympics consisted of three competitors, two track and field athletes; Toluta'u Koula and Ana Siulolo Liku; and weightlifter Tevita Kofe Ngalu." - Recommend removing "to these Olympics" as this is implied and "three competitors" since the reader can easily surmise the total. Makes the sense more concise. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

Background

• "The Kingdom made its Olympic debut at the 1984 Summer Olympics, and has appeared at every Summer Olympic Games since then, making these Sydney Games their fifth appearance." - nowhere prior have you referred to Tonga as a "Kingdom". This should be referenced earlier int he article of expanded to *"Kingdom of Tonga" in this instance.
• "The Tongan delegation to these Olympics consisted of three competitors, two track and field athletes; Toluta'u Koula and Ana Siulolo Liku; and weightlifter Tevita Kofe Ngalu." - Same comment from the lead. I also am not a big fan of exact duplicates on sentences in an article. Maybe rewrite into two sentences? « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

Athletics

• "Toluta'u Koula was 30 years old at the time of the Sydney Olympics, and was making..." - recommend splitting into two sentences after "Sydney Olympics"
• "The gold medal was eventually won in 9.87 seconds by Maurice Greene of the United States; the silver was won by Ato Boldon of Trinidad and Tobago, and the bronze was earned by Obadele Thompson of Barbados" - either use a semi-colon after Tobago, or remove the comma after Tobago altogether. I recommend the first option.
• "1996 Atlanta Olympics" link to 1996 Summer Olympics
• "On 25 September, she was drawn into heat three of the women's 100 meter hurdles, where she finished the race in a time of 14.58 seconds, eighth and last in her heat, and she was eliminated." - recommend splitting into two sentences after "seconds". Note that you also do not need the last "she" « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

Weightlifting

• "Tevita Kofe Ngalu was 27 years old at the time of the Sydney Olympics, and was making his only Olympic appearance." - no need for the comma after Olympics. Also, although unlikely, I assume he is still eligible to compete in the Olympics? Thus he made his only appearance to date or he made his first appearance?

  Comma removed. He'll be 49 at the time of Tokyo, so, technically eligible, yes, but his chances of making another trip to the Games resemble those of a snowball in Tonga. Courcelles (talk) 21:55, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

• "...for an athlete to rank for the event, and each weightlifter got three attempts in each discipline..." - no need for the comma
• "...however four weightlifters failed to set any mark in the snatch, and they were not allowed to advance to the clean and jerk." - no need for the comma or the word "they"
• "This placed him 13th and last, as another four lifters failed to set a mark in the clean and jerk and those lifters went unranked in the competition" - recommend rewording "as another" to "although". Also, "those lifters" can be removed. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

Images

• Only photo is the Tongan flag, which is PD. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

References

• Refs look good.
• Slight concern that there is only two real sources for this information in total. Like to have at least 3-4. Are there any other sources (news articles, etc) that could be added?
  • Found some sources from ESPN, The Daily Telegraph, and the IAAF that back up what was already in the article and added them; failed to find anything new to add, though. Courcelles (talk) 22:08, 29 November 2018 (UTC)
• Were you planning on archiving the sources? If so, please do so before the GA review is done so I can review the formatting of the refs. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:22, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

Comments

• Looks good Courcelles, no major issues. Will place on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:22, 29 November 2018 (UTC)
  • Everything addressed, Gonzo fan2007; references archived as well. Courcelles (talk) 22:10, 29 November 2018 (UTC)
    • Nice work. Passed. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:34, 30 November 2018 (UTC)