Talk:Waterbury and Milldale Tramway

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 05:50, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Hi!! I'll review this on 2 August UTC. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 05:50, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Thanks for the fun read! On hold; over to you. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 22:09, 2 August 2023 (UTC)

@LunaEatsTuna: Thanks for the review! My replies are below - nothing much except a few grammatical quibbles. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 06:09, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

Looks good to me! Pass. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 21:04, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check

Earwig is happy; I am happy.

File(s)

All files are appropriate, relevant and copyright-free—the first two have valid public domain rationale on Commons and the last one was taken and uploaded to Commons under CC BY-SA 4.0 by a Wikipedia user.

Prose

• "in downtown Waterbury" – wikilink Waterbury as first mention in the body.
  •  Done
• Should Cheshire in Cheshire line be wikilinked to Cheshire, Connecticut?
  •  Done
• I would wikilink right-of-way for unfamiliar readers.
  •  Done
• What does "on-street" mean? Should it say "situated on public roadways" or does it mean something else?
  • I've reworded slightly to clarify.
• I would start the next sentence with The.
  • I don't think "The" is needed here.
• "A streetcar line" – wikilink.
  •  Done
• Does any source say why Woodruff vetoed it?
  • Source 11 says His reason was that the tendency has been to overcapitalize such companies. That's a very generic explanation, and the implication I get from source 10 and other contemporary articles is that the actual reasons were much more complex and rooted in politics too esoteric for me to understand.
• "about 1,500 feet (460 m) east from Milldale" – should it not be east of Milldale? Apologies of this is standard in American English, which I do not speak.
  • My understand was that "from" matches "to", but I could be mistaken.
• "to better connect with the Connecticut Company line" – how about "aiming to enhance connectivity with the Connecticut Company line" instead? Better connect sounds odd IMO.
  •  Done (with slightly different wording)
• "creating an all-paved road" – recommend "fully-paved".
  •  Done
• "CTtransit" should be "CT Transit" as the former is a stylisation.
  •  Done
• "Two additional cars" – I would find a way to rephrase this since the last sentence also began with the same line. Relatedly:
  •  Done
• I think "numbered 112 and 114" should use two dashes instead of commas since it describes attributes of the cars.
  • I think either dashes or commas would have been fine, but with the rewording I don't think either are necessary.

Refs

Passes spotcheck on refs 2, 7, 20, 25, 38 and 48.

Others

• Add a short description.
  •  Done
• Recommend adding template:use mdy dates (optional).
  •  Done
• Recommend adding template:use X English (optional).
  •  Done

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.