Talk:We Can't Stop/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HĐ (talk · contribs) 08:03, 5 January 2014 (UTC)

One of my favorite songs. I'll do the review — Simon (talk) 08:03, 5 January 2014 (UTC)

Lead

• "We Can't Stop" is a song by American recording artist Miley Cyrus for her fourth studio album Bangerz (2013) ---> I think "taken from" is more suitable than "for"

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• as the lead single from the record ---> from the album

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• that lyrically talks ---> remove "lyrically"

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• reached at ---> grammar

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• reaching 100 million views in ---> within

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Background

• In 2012, Cyrus announced plans to focus on her film career ---> Past tense

• I'm sorry, I'm not quite sure of the revision you're requesting, since "announced" is the past tense of that verb.

• Oops, I was misleading with "plans", sorry :P — Simon (talk) 04:48, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• Cyrus announced that the track would be released on June 3, commenting that "it really just turned out to be perfect and exactly what [she] wanted, and exactly what [she] wanted [her] first sound to be, and [her] first look to be" ---> what's with the "[]"?

I don't know if I'm right to butt in here, but I just wanted to say that "[]" are used to add information in the quote that makes it easier to understand and adds clarity, without resorting to modify the quote itself. The words inside the square brackets are not a part of the quote itself, but instead just makes particular stuff, for example who the person was referring to, clear. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 13:06, 9 January 2014 (UTC)

@WonderBoy1998: Comments from other editors are welcome in GA reviews, don't worry! @HĐ: The reason I included the brackets was because the original quote by Miley was given in the first-person. My idea was that if I'm referring to Cyrus in the third-person throughout the article, it would be odd if the sentences alternated between the first and third person; like WonderBoy1998 has suggested, the brackets indicate that the text has been modified from the original quote, including changing/adding a couple small words.

@WikiRedactor: If you add the "[her]" or "[she]" in the quote, that must be a passive sentence. But here is the active form, so the quote couldn't change its subject — Simon (talk) 04:48, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

@HĐ: Very well then, I've changed the quotes you pointed out and I looked through the article to make sure I changed ones in later sections as well.

Composition

• Cyrus clarified that she was referring to ecstasy, commenting that "if you’re aged ten it’s 'Miley', if you know what [she's] talking about then you know. [She] just wanted it to be played on the radio and they’ve already had to edit it so much." ---> Again, it's her quote so she's talking about "me", not "her"

Please see above.

Critical

• The section seems fine, but there are many quotes, try to change the quotes into your own sentence

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Commercial

• In its seventh week on the chart, the track reached number two on the chart, ---> Repetition of "chart"

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• "We Can't Stop" reached number eight on the Ö3 Austria Top 40;[36] it also peaked at numbers 11 and 20 on the Belgian Ultratop in Wallonia and Flanders, respectively.[36] "We Can't Stop" reached number 11 on the Danish Tracklisten,[36] where it was also recognized with a platinum certification.[37] The song reached number three on the Norwegian VG-lista,[36] and number five on both the Spanish Singles Chart and the Swedish Sverigetopplistan,[36] number seven on the Irish Singles Chart,[36] and number nine in the Czech Republic.[38] The track also reached number ten on the The Official Lebanese Top 20.[39] ---> Repetition of "reached", try to find other words such as "peaked at", "charted at" or something else

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Still reviewing — Simon (talk) 04:29, 18 January 2014 (UTC)

• Now the lead has one {{citation needed}} — Simon (talk) 10:38, 28 January 2014 (UTC)

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• Composition : "where I is in am life now" ---> unclear statement — Simon (talk) 10:38, 28 January 2014 (UTC)

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• Music video: Too much images, try to remove some of them — Simon (talk) 10:38, 28 January 2014 (UTC)

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• With 10.7 million views in the first twenty-four hours of its release.... in six days ---> This should be in the "Reception" section — Simon (talk) 10:38, 28 January 2014 (UTC)

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Live performances

• Mostly good, except the parody "We Did Stop (The Government)" doesn't belong to this section

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Cover

• Source for The Vamps cover is YouTube, which is not a good source to choose. Try to find articles or news about the cover

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Release history

• Was the song only released in US and UK, or in any other territories? — Simon (talk) 07:33, 3 February 2014 (UTC)

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• Well I have no comments left, so I will pass the article. Nicely done! — Simon (talk) 01:31, 4 February 2014 (UTC)