Talk:Who's That Girl (1987 film)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk) 22:26, 27 November 2010 (UTC)

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Disambiguations: none found

Linkrot: none found. Jezhotwells (talk) 22:30, 27 November 2010 (UTC)

Checking against GA criteria

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   Other incidents involved the escaping of a live cougar, which was used for the shooting. "escape" would be correct.

   The film was released on August 8, 1987, amidst a glitzy premiere at Times Square of New York. "glitzy is a weasel word, the phrase "amidst a glitzy première" is ungrammatical.

   Madonna herself made a promotional appearance at the premiere, noting her experience of arriving at the venue for the first time, eight years before Poor gramar, "herself" is unneccessaery, the subclause "noting her experience of arriving at the venue for the first time, eight years before" makes no sense.

   Still, Who's That Girl ended up being a critical and commercial failure."" "Still" here is a weasel word representing a pOV

   Who's That Girl opened to about 1000 American theatres "to"? "in" would be correct.

   Its worldwide total was about $7.3 million "gross" would be the right word, or perhaps "total sales"

   One day, her boyfriend Johnny catches some henchmen stealing money ... "henchmen" of whom?

   Loudon's bride Wendy Worthington (Haviland Morris) is a flaky woman who is more consumed in her wedding plans than in her fiancée. "in" is not the right word.

   ...then go to the New York City state prison for an apparent wellfare move by Worthington's company, ... spelling and the phrase "welfare move" is meaningless.

   There Nikki and Loudon—who had become close with each other on their journey—expresses their feelings for each other. Very poor prose.

   OK, enough! This article is badly written and fails WP:GACR criterion #1. I have scanned through the rest and it is full of similar errors to those outlined above. Please get it copy-edited by someone who can write good plain English.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   The article is adequately referenced, references support the facts, I assume good faith for off-line sources.

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   The caption for File:Whos that girl cartoon.jpg should read "opening credits, rather than "starting credits.

   The image File:Times Square Evening.jpg appears to have purely decorative use, see Wikipedia:Images#Pertinence and encyclopedic nature

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   This article is badly written and thus does not meet good article standards. Please get it copy-edited and then perhaps a peer review before renomination. GA reviews are not the place to correct basic errors. Please make sure that articles meet the criteria before nominating. Failed GA nomination. Jezhotwells (talk) 22:57, 27 November 2010 (UTC)