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The result was: promoted by BlueMoonset (talk) 06:30, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

Abd al-Malik Abd al-Wahid

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Created by Prioryman (talk). Self nom at 12:52, 27 December 2012 (UTC)

Per the discussion at Wikipedia talk:Did you know/GibraltarPediA Options, Gibraltar-related articles are temporarily being reviewed by two individuals. In addition to the regular DYK criteria, at least one reviewer should also indicate whether they perceive any conflict of interest or promotional concerns about the article under review.IP addresses and Victuallers are not allowed to do the reviews.
  • Review 2:
  • Shouldn't the article be split into sections? As per MOS:LAYOUT, a lead section including the most relevant aspects of the sections below it is mandatory. The article looks like a huge lead the way it is. It would be helpful for the layout of the article to have an infobox, too. I see no problems with referencing, except for the first paragraph that is unsourced. Furthermore, I have a comprehension problem with the third paragraph; to me, the sentence ″It might have developed into a wider war backed by Malik's father Abu al-Hasan had the Zayyanid kingdom of Tlemcen (now part of Algeria) not revolted against Moroccan rule.″ seems to have a missing comma anywhere. Also, I have made a slight correction to grammar. That's all for now--Jetstreamer Talk 00:12, 18 January 2013 (UTC)
  • I've split it into sections now and reworded that third paragraph sentence you cited. I'm afraid I don't know of an infobox that would be suitable but to be honest, I'm not sure the article is long enough to merit one. The first paragraph (which was meant to be the lead, and is now more clearly thus) is left mostly uncited as per the usual convention - it just summarises the cited information elsewhere in the article. Prioryman (talk) 00:23, 18 January 2013 (UTC)
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