Template:Did you know nominations/Augustus Barrows

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The result was: promoted by BlueMoonset (talk) 04:31, 16 December 2012 (UTC)

Augustus Barrows

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... that lumberman Augustus Barrows became Speaker of the Wisconsin State Assembly in 1878, even though his Greenback Party only held 13 seats out of 100, and he had never served in the legislature before?
ALT1:... that lumberman Augustus Barrows was elected Speaker of the Wisconsin State Assembly in 1878, even though his Greenback Party only held 13 seats out of 100, and he was new to that body?
ALT2:... that lumberman Augustus Barrows was elected Speaker of the Wisconsin State Assembly in 1878, even though his Greenback Party only held 13 seats out of 100, and he was a freshman legislator?

Created/expanded by Orangemike (talk), RFD (talk). Nominated by Orangemike (talk) at 18:27, 1 December 2012 (UTC)

The source of the hook is too long and needs to be broken up and combined with the parenthetical sentence that follows like so: He was chosen Speaker on January 9, 1878 because the Assembly consisted of 45 Republicans, 41 Democrats, 13 Greenbacks and a Socialist, and thus the Greenbacks and Socialist had leverage as potential tie-breakers because the two major parties held mere pluralities. That also puts the cite right after the source. Otherwise good to go.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:25, 6 December 2012 (UTC)

Addressed this; also trimmed the superfluous word "Wisconsin" from the hook, since it appears later therein. --Orange Mike | Talk 03:50, 6 December 2012 (UTC)

Still 6 characters over the limit; sorry forgot to check before.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:53, 6 December 2012 (UTC)

I think it's OK now. --Orange Mike | Talk 04:09, 6 December 2012 (UTC)

Currently 201 characters in the hook as written. How about changing the final clause to "and he was a first-time legislator" or "and he was new to the legislature" (186 and 185 characters respectively)? (When you change it, please make it an ALT1 hook, so we can see how it has changed. Thanks.) BlueMoonset (talk) 02:31, 15 December 2012 (UTC)

I think that Alt 2 reads better.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:00, 15 December 2012 (UTC)