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The result was: promoted by Miyagawa (talk) 08:35, 20 April 2013 (UTC).
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Charles O'Rear
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... that Charles O'Rear (pictured) has clicked "the most viewed image of the world" which was purchased by Microsoft with "the second most expensive photo licence ever"?
- Reviewed: Cape Nome
5x expanded by Vivvt (talk). Self nominated at 04:27, 13 April 2013 (UTC).
Expansion is OK. Couple problems though. One is the second quote, the source doesn't say it was the second-most expensive license of all time, just that it was reportedly that. Also, can we change the phrasing a bit? "Clicked", which I assume means "photographed", borders on ungrammatical in American English. "Took" would work better for American English, but I don't know for other variants of English. "Snapped" might work, but it seems quite informal. Also, we should link to the work, Bliss. Finally, this hook seems more about Bliss than about O'Rear himself, with the focus on the viewership of the image and the expense of the license. I don't know how well that can be addressed, however. —/Mendaliv/2¢/Δ's/ 16:50, 14 April 2013 (UTC)
ALT1: ... that photographer Charles O'Rear (pictured) is credited to have taken "the most viewed image of the world"?ALT2: ... that Charles O'Rear (pictured) is the photographer for "the most viewed image of the world"?- ALT3: ... that when Charles O'Rear (pictured) took a photograph of a green, lush hillside near Napa Valley, he didn't expect it to be "the most viewed image of the world"?
- Taken out the payment part of the hook. Providing three new hooks. Let me know which one sounds better. Also, he is known for bliss so I dont think there is anything can (should) be done to avoid that. I am not providing any link to bliss in the hook because there is a complete section for the image in the article. Just trying to avoid multiple links in the same hook to avoid forking. - Vivvt (Talk) 03:59, 15 April 2013 (UTC)
