- The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Orlady (talk) 16:15, 31 January 2012 (UTC)
Erick Thohir
edit- ... that in 2011 Indonesian businessman Erick Thohir became the first Asian to own an NBA franchise?
- ALT1:... that Indonesian businessman Erick Thohir is part of the consortium that owns the NBA team the Philadelphia 76ers together with Will and Jada Pinkett Smith?
Created/expanded by Crisco 1492 (talk). Self nom at 06:31, 12 January 2012 (UTC)
- Reviewed: Ocean County Sheriff's Department
The prose states that he was born in 1959 or 1960, whilst the infobox states that he was born in 1969 or 1970. Which is correct? Otherwise fine. Eisfbnore talk 14:51, 12 January 2012 (UTC)
- Fixed. I missed fixing that after the calculation feature in the infobox told me I needed to work on my maths. Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:50, 12 January 2012 (UTC)
- A small close paraphrase: Article: "After returning to Indonesia, he formed the Mahaka Group together with Muhammad Lutfi, Wisnu Wardhana and R. Harry Zulnardy". Source: "In 1993, after five years in the United States where he completed his master’s degree in communications, Erick formed the Mahaka Group with partners Muhammad Lutfi, Wisnu Wardhana and R. Harry Zulnardy." Phrase ordering is the same: "Return to Indonesia" - "form Mahaka Group" - "with Muhammad Lutfi..." This one was not particularly severe, and the rest of the text was deliciously paraphrased, so I'll assume that this is only an accidental slip from the nominator. Eisfbnore talk 21:28, 12 January 2012 (UTC)
I personally think the original phrasing was more logical (i.e. "After (event), (subject) (predicate) (object) with (people)" instead of "After (event), (subject), with (people), (predicate) (object)"), but it's been changed anyway. Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:37, 12 January 2012 (UTC)
