Template:Did you know nominations/John W. Dwinelle

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The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 07:43, 9 July 2013 (UTC)

John W. Dwinelle

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John W. Dwinelle

Created/expanded by Gamaliel (talk). Self nominated at 23:44, 25 June 2013 (UTC).

  • I've rewritten that part of the hook. Gamaliel (talk) 19:08, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
  • Revised hook is unfortunately too long at 212 characters (201 omitting "pictured"), with 200 the absolute maximum (and shorter very desirable). It's better if you propose ALT hooks rather than editing the original hook, so comments make sense in retrospect. Thanks! BlueMoonset (talk) 20:19, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
This should knock it down to just under 200 (with the pictured). I'm out of ideas without eliminating one of the three parts of the sentence. Gamaliel (talk) 21:03, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
  • Full review needed, using ALT1 as hook (struck earlier, overlong hook). BlueMoonset (talk) 03:12, 9 July 2013 (UTC)
  • All three facts in hook are cited and online. (Tweaked one link to send to correct page) Long enough, new enough etc. No copyvio, good to go! -- Hillbillyholiday talk 05:49, 9 July 2013 (UTC)