- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:34, 31 January 2017 (UTC)
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Komboni
edit... that Zambian slums called Kombonis began when white landowners housed their African employees in irregular neighborhoods on their compounds?Source: "Technically, since the only Africans who were allowed to live in such areas were the employees of the white settlers (who were authorized to house their employees on their so-called compounds), such neighborhoods were unauthorized at their origins." [1]- ALT1:
... that approximately 80% of residents of Lusaka live in one of 37 slums called Kombonis?Source: "These settlements, which have grown in number over time, form Lusaka's current 37 compounds." [...] "Approximately 80% of its population live in poor, unplanned settlements (also known as ma komboni), which constitute 20% of the city's residential land."[2]
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5x expanded by ONUnicorn (talk). Self-nominated at 15:59, 9 January 2017 (UTC).
- I think that ALT1 is the better choice, because it is punchier and more interesting to general readers. The sourcing and policy-compliance check out. The expansion started January 3.
My one concern is that the expansion looks to me, based on character count, to be just slightly below 5-fold. --Tryptofish (talk) 00:35, 11 January 2017 (UTC)
- I'll work on expanding it a little more tomorrow, and also get the QPQ done. ~ ONUnicorn(Talk|Contribs)problem solving 20:52, 11 January 2017 (UTC)
- Should be long enough now. I'll do the QPQ tomorrow. ~ ONUnicorn(Talk|Contribs)problem solving 04:25, 13 January 2017 (UTC)
- The length looks good, thanks. --Tryptofish (talk) 23:11, 13 January 2017 (UTC)
- I added a QPQ. @Tryptofish: can you give it the final green checkmark please? ~ ONUnicorn(Talk|Contribs)problem solving 18:21, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
- The length looks good, thanks. --Tryptofish (talk) 23:11, 13 January 2017 (UTC)
- Should be long enough now. I'll do the QPQ tomorrow. ~ ONUnicorn(Talk|Contribs)problem solving 04:25, 13 January 2017 (UTC)
- I think that ALT1 is the better choice, because it is punchier and more interesting to general readers. The sourcing and policy-compliance check out. The expansion started January 3.
for ALT1. Everything has been addressed. --Tryptofish (talk) 22:14, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
Re-opened in light of discussions at here. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:16, 23 January 2017 (UTC)
Discussion from Prep Area 6
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== Prep 6 - kombonis (ma or not ma?) ==
So I added "Zambia" because I'm certain that a vast majority of our "English-speaking" audience don't know where Lusaka is. And I changed "one of 37" to "1 of 37" per our manual of style (MOSNUM), but looking at the source, it calls these "ma kombonis" not simply "kombonis". So I'd like to see this fixed or clarified before it hits the main page. Asking ONUnicorn, Tryptofish and Cwmhiraeth, all of whom were clearly very happy with the discrepancy in nomenclature (and italics). Plus, the sole source for this was published 10 months ago, so it needs a timeframe, so "as of March 2016", or even better, when the research was actually conducted for the book.... I would suggest these kind of numbers are fluid so stating it as fact as of now is somewhat dubious. The Rambling Man (talk) 21:56, 22 January 2017 (UTC)
Pull: Yoninah's version is a substantial improvement, so thanks for that. :) I was going to post some tweaks, but I think we have bigger issues to look at, including:
@The Rambling Man: Thank you for bringing up these issues.
I hope this clarifies things somewhat. I'll try to make both the article and the nomination clearer. Can we actually continue discussion of the article itself on the article's talk page? I'll copy this discussion there. I welcome any feedback anyone has. ~ ONUnicorn(Talk|Contribs)problem solving 16:24, 23 January 2017 (UTC) |
I believe both of these clear up the confusion. ~ ONUnicorn(Talk|Contribs)problem solving 18:33, 23 January 2017 (UTC)
- Oh, and regarding The Rambling Man's concerns about the source using the prefix ma, Google translate (I know - not the best source for translation - but it's what's readily available) translates the ma as Nyanja for "the", so basically, "the komobonis". The ku kombonis used by the other source I mentioned translates as "to kombonis", but again, given the context I'd think it meant something more like at rather than to. ~ ONUnicorn(Talk|Contribs)problem solving 21:29, 23 January 2017 (UTC)
- I found a Nyanja-English dictionary] published in 1979. It translates ku as "to, at, in" (so my reading of context and Google Translate are both correct). That dictionary does not include Ma as a separate word; though it does include it as a prefix, but that definition doesn't make sense in context. ~ ONUnicorn(Talk|Contribs)problem solving 21:44, 23 January 2017 (UTC)
- Hi, I was pinged here. ALT3 is stringing together too many facts – it says 80% of the population of Lusaka lives in slums, and then says that Lusaka has 37 such slums. Shorter is always hookier; leave the reader wanting to know something so they'll click on the article. ALT4 is fine if you really want to tell the reader all this information. I lowercased "kombonis" and tweaked the grammar in the hooks. Yoninah (talk) 21:34, 23 January 2017 (UTC)
- Several points still need consideration:
- Should "komboni" be italicised or not?
- Two references in the article have common content (1 and 6). 6 needs to be changed to show the actual authors and formatted as a chapter in an edited book, and everything common needs citation to just one of those sources, and the same one. The author, Garth Myers, should not have used to same text in two different sources, and if he re-used more than the section I identified then he has likely created a copyright issue (not our problem, but not a good practice from an author we are using as a reliable source).
- On "slum", the first sentence is a problem. A section in the article can explore the term and its implications, and then a summary written for the lede. It presently asserts, in Wikipedia's voice, that a kombani is a type of slum. We need solid sourcing to support that. I haven't looked in detail, but at the moment my impression is that an appropriate lede might be along the lines of:
- Oh, and regarding The Rambling Man's concerns about the source using the prefix ma, Google translate (I know - not the best source for translation - but it's what's readily available) translates the ma as Nyanja for "the", so basically, "the komobonis". The ku kombonis used by the other source I mentioned translates as "to kombonis", but again, given the context I'd think it meant something more like at rather than to. ~ ONUnicorn(Talk|Contribs)problem solving 21:29, 23 January 2017 (UTC)
“ | Komoboni is a Zambian term for an informal community characterised by high population density where low-income residents typically have some rights of occupation. Approximately 80& of the population of Lusaka (Zambia's capital) live in kombonis, which occupy around 20% of the city's area. They have been compared to the urban slum areas of Brazil (favela), and are home to a majority of urban-dwelling Zambians, with komboni found in most Zambian cities; however, they differ from illegal squatter camps where provision of services by state and local authorities does not occur. Historically, many komboni communities began on lands of a company, mine, or estate, as housing areas for its employees. In modern times, these communities include middle-class families and locally-based entrepreneurial efforts are leading to improvements in resident's quality of life. Kombani Radio, based in the communities, has achieved high popularity and portrays itself as the "voice of the people". | ” |
- ALT2b:
... that approximately 80% of residents of Lusaka, Zambia, live in kombonis that occupy 20% of the city's land?
- This ALT is based on Yoninah's with the links combined and the area occupied added, as I think it gives an impression of the komboni population density. I like leaving the term unexplained for hookiness. Choosing a hook is the easy part, however, as the article content changes need to but up to standards as well. EdChem (talk) 00:20, 24 January 2017 (UTC)
- ALT2b:
- I endorse ALT2a, as accurate and catchy. I think that ALT2b ends up being too long, and the area percentage isn't that critical.
- I'm not sure what to say about italicizing it. I've made an edit to the page to clarify the authorship etc. of cite #6. I take the other points about handling the two similar cites, but it seems to me that this is not a GA review, and I do not see these things as something that should hold up a DYK.
- I've thought about the issue of slum, and also read the comments at the article talk page about it, and I think that there is a reasonable concern about it carrying emotional weight, and that it simply is not necessary to include it in the lead sentence. I've revised the lead as follows:
- A komboni is a type of compound or informal housing area common to Zambia, particularly the capital city of Lusaka. It is characterized by a low income and a high population density.[1]: 72 Kombonis typically began as housing for employees of a particular company, estate, or mine.[1] An estimated 35% of Zambians live in urban areas,[2] and kombonis exist in many of them.[3] It is estimated that 80% of the population of Lusaka live and work in these areas.[3]
- Perhaps this gets us close to going ahead with ALT2a. --Tryptofish (talk) 00:08, 25 January 2017 (UTC)
I think this may be ready for a reviewer to look over the ALT2 variants, though I'm not quite sure. Either way, it clearly isn't ready to be promoted immediately, so I'm superseding the pre-pull tick with this icon so the nomination doesn't show up in the list as promotable. BlueMoonset (talk) 06:16, 28 January 2017 (UTC)
- Given that discussion seems to be less active, I'd like to wrap this review up. Unless any other editors raise concerns in the next 24 hours, I'm going to give the green OK mark to ALT2A. --Tryptofish (talk) 21:05, 29 January 2017 (UTC)
for ALT2A. --Tryptofish (talk) 01:05, 31 January 2017 (UTC)
References
- ^ a b Myers, Garth (24 February 2016). Urban Environments in Africa: A Critical Analysis of Environmental Politics. Policy Press. pp. 65–73. ISBN 9781447322924. Retrieved 28 December 2016.
- ^ Smith, Georgina, rest of cite defined in another section.
- ^ a b Chigunta, Francis; Gough, Katherine V.; Langevang, Thilde (2016). "Young entrepreneurs in Lusaka: Overcoming constraints through ingenuity amd social entrepreneurship". In Gough, Katherine V.; Langevang, Thilde (eds.). Young Entrepreneurs in Sub-Saharan Africa. Routledge Spaces of Childhood and Youth Series. Routledge. pp. 67–79. ISBN 9781317548379.