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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 16:07, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
Mei-Ann Chen
edit... that during her five-year tenure with the Portland Youth Philharmonic, Taiwanese American conductor Mei-Ann Chen became the first woman to win the Malko Competition, the "world's most prestigious prize" for young conductors?
Created/expanded by Another Believer (talk). Self nom at 15:57, 26 September 2011 (UTC)
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Impressive article. However, I have a couple of issues with the hook. It is quite long and somewhat dull (the two are probably related). How about trimming it a bit, like ALT1 ... that only four years after starting conducting, Mei-Ann Chen became the first woman to win the Malko Competition, the "world's most prestigious prize" in that field?
- Other suggestions are, of course, welcome. Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:48, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
- Thank you. I was simply trying to provide some context about which organization Chen was with when she received the award. The Malko Competition is an international award and is not directly related to the Philharmonic in any way. I imagine this would make more sense if an article existed for the competition. However, if you find the hook to be dull, the following hook might work:
- ALT2 "... that Taiwanese American conductor Mei-Ann Chen became the first student to graduate from Boston's New England Conservatory with a double master's degree in conducting and violin performance?"
- OR, simply
- ALT3 "... that Mei-Ann Chen became the first woman to win the Malko Competition, the "world's most prestigious prize" for conducting?"
- I would not include "after only four years of conducting" as this is somewhat subjective. --Another Believer (Talk) 15:18, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
I prefer ALT3, but ALT2 is okay too. The hook must be under 200 characters with spaces, and your original was 228. Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:38, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
- Sounds good. Thanks for your assistance, and please let me know if any other concerns need to be addressed. --Another Believer (Talk) 15:40, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
- That's it from me. Great article! Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:46, 29 September 2011 (UTC)