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The result was: promoted by PumpkinSky talk 11:58, 3 September 2012 (UTC)

Melissa Tapper

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  • Reviewed: Amanita eliae
  • Comment: Moved from user space. Save for Paralympics?

Created/expanded by LauraHale (talk). Self nom at 04:14, 27 July 2012 (UTC)

  • Article is new enough, long enough and there are no copyright concerns. Article supports fact in hook. Article is fully referenced and there are no {{fact}} tags. QPQ is good in this case. I would advise saving until the Paralympic period. Thine Antique Pen 09:25, 27 July 2012 (UTC)
  • This article, that's going on the front page, can it please have some sentence variation? Count how many of the sentences begin with "she" or a variation of "in 2010, she...". Thine Antique Pen, it's perfectly alright to ask for decent writing, or to improve it. Drmies (talk) 01:38, 28 July 2012 (UTC)
  • Problem with the hook. All people have a brachial plexus, in fact we all have two of them, if there is something wrong with one or both of her's the hook should say so. Roger (talk) 17:18, 7 August 2012 (UTC)
  • Given the issues raised by Roger and Drmies, work is still needed before this can be promoted. BlueMoonset (talk) 14:38, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
    • Corrected the hook. Smoothed the text a bit to address concerns. Hawkeye7 (talk) 02:39, 24 August 2012 (UTC)
  • From what I'm reading, both in the various article sources and in Erb's palsy, the palsy is what she has, which is "a paralysis of the arm caused by injury to the upper group of the arm's main nerves", i.e., in "part of the brachial plexus". The injury usually happens during birth, which is what happened to her. So to say she has the injury and Erb's palsy is redundant, both in the hook and the article. Since the sources specify that the damage is to her right arm, the article should reflect that, and maybe the hook as well. Maybe something like "even though she has Erb's palsy with brachial plexus damage in her right arm"? You could also drop one or the other—"Erb's palsy" or "brachial plexus"—while retaining the right arm info. Can you please come up with an ALT1? Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 04:43, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
  • Made two tiny grammatical corrections to ALT1; restoring original tick now that hook issue is settled and some smoothing done to the text. BlueMoonset (talk) 14:13, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
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