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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:25, 7 August 2017 (UTC)

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Seth Ledyard Phelps

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5x expanded by Gwillhickers (talk). Self-nominated at 01:38, 16 July 2017 (UTC).

Comment: hook info and citation found in the second paragraph of the Battle of Fort Henry section

Substantial article, on excellent sources, offline sources accepted assuming good faith, no copyvio obvious. Go to GA and FA after this. The image is licensed and gives a good idea of the man and his period. - The hook would not attract me to click, sorry. Two links before the main topic even arrives are distracting. Begin with him, and say something he did, not that he was sent to do, please. How about river reconnaissance? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 10:02, 1 August 2017 (UTC)
Well, almost all things officers of Phelps's rank did were ordered, including his reconnaissance missions. The fall of Fort Henry was a major turning point for the Union during the Civil War, having endured many defeats at the hands of Confederates up to that point. That Phelps was chosen to raise the American flag over the captured Confederate fort, hearalding this event, at least to me, as a Civil War history buff, more than invokes my desire to look into this episode further, as it did when I first encountered this historical fact. Having said that, I'm hoping you'll reconsider. -- Gwillhickers (talk) 05:04, 2 August 2017 (UTC)
considered --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:06, 2 August 2017 (UTC)
  • I agree with Gerda Arendt that the hook is boring, and the subject's name should appear earlier in the hook. But I understand that American history buffs would appreciate this. How about:
  • ALT1: ... that commander Seth Ledyard Phelps (pictured) helped hoist the American flag over the Confederate Fort Henry after it fell to the Union? Yoninah (talk) 23:31, 3 August 2017 (UTC)
  • That makes sense, but we should keep Admiral Foote's name/link in the hook. He was a famous Civil War naval admiral who was Phelps's commander. Mentioning that he gave orders to Phelps gives added historical context to the hook and at the same time helps to attract readers. Also, we don't need to link 'Confederate' and 'Union', as these are common knowledge items to anyone with the remotest knowledge of the Civil War. When the article is read the reader will also find out that Phelps was sent with a fellow officer.
both approved. I prefer ALT1, - every link added to a hook takes away from the main subject. But the author's will is my command ;) Gerda Arendt (talk) 05:55, 4 August 2017‎ (UTC)
Thanks. Just a note, ALT1 has four links to it, yet doesn't mention Admiral Foote, who was a central figure in this theater. Too many links is certainly not good. Admiral Foote however has name recognition to Civil War buffs and many students of history, and imo will help draw many more readers to the hook, which in turn will introduce them to Phelps, who doesn't have that name recognition. Strongly recommend ALT2. -- Gwillhickers (talk) 14:29, 4 August 2017 (UTC)
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