Template:Did you know nominations/Submarine Telegraph Company

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:59, 18 February 2019 (UTC)

Submarine Telegraph Company

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  • ... that completion of the Submarine Telegraph Company's first oceanic telegraph cable was delayed because the ship sent to lay the last piece did not know where Sangatte was? Source: Smith, p. 17

Created by Spinningspark (talk). Self-nominated at 23:32, 15 January 2019 (UTC).

  • ALT1 ... that completion of the Submarine Telegraph Company's first oceanic telegraph cable was delayed because the crew of the ship sent to lay the last piece did not know where Sangatte was?
  • Hi Spinningspark, review follows: article created 15 January (one previous deleted revision from 2013 with no content); article is of good length and well written; article is cited inline to reliable sources throughout; I didn't find any copyright violations or overly close paraphrasing of the sources; hook is interesting, cited in the article and backed up by the source; I amended the hook slightly to add "the crew of", it is perhaps a little ungainly but otherwise the we would be talking about the ship itself knowing the location of Sangatte; QPQ has been started - Dumelow (talk) 08:11, 16 January 2019 (UTC)
  • I've turned your change into ALT1. I also suggest ALT2 since there were company staff on board as well as crew. You'd think they would know where the cable was supposed to go. "No one on board" is pretty much what the source says. SpinningSpark 10:56, 16 January 2019 (UTC)
  • ALT2 ... that completion of the Submarine Telegraph Company's first oceanic telegraph cable was delayed because no one on board the ship sent to lay the last piece knew where Sangatte was?
  • Just to confirm I am happy with either of the alts, slightly favouring ALT2 - Dumelow (talk) 10:59, 16 January 2019 (UTC)
  • I forgot to put this in the article earlier, it would also make a great hook,
  • paging Dumelow to take a look at ALT3, since it isn't eligible until it's reviewed. Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 18:05, 10 February 2019 (UTC)
I altered it slightly to "opening" rather than "completion" to reflect the article and source (completion seems to have been a month earlier). But otherwise ALT3 is acceptable also - Dumelow (talk) 07:53, 11 February 2019 (UTC)