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The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 03:00, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

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The Legend of Korra (action video game)

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Created by Sandstein (talk), ViperSnake151 (talk). Nominated by Sandstein (talk) at 19:50, 27 June 2014 (UTC).
Reviewed Template:Did you know nominations/Jayanti.

  • New (26th), long enough, neutral, some close paraphrasing to fix, QPQ done. Hook's not terribly interesting—I wouldn't deny it on that account, but wouldn't it be better to add more of why the dev is a good fit or something a bit more hooky/enticing? czar ♔ 01:58, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
  • @Czar:: Thanks for reviewing! I fixed the paraphrasing issues, I think: most of the reports are, like, three or four common words in a row. Alternate hooks:
It was relatively minor paraphrasing that, in all honesty, doesn't concern me, but one of the reviewers was going to call it out if I didn't. The recent change with switching "elements" can also be further rephrased to not use the original language. Can you check the rest of your work against the duplication detector? New hooks are much better—good work. Outside of the lede, there should be another link to the animated series (and, ideally, a source that confirms it is an animated TV series). czar ♔ 12:36, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
OK, I've added a paragraph about the series, but I don't see what else could or should be changed, specifically, with respect to close paraphrasing.  Sandstein  14:09, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
Things like [1]. Not dire, but the phrasing shouldn't be that close, right? (I was asking for you to verify for yourself before I go through it.) czar ♔ 14:40, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
I'm sorry, but I just don't see the problem here. These are sequences of four or three words like "dimartino and bryan konietzko" or "series the legend of korra" that are likely to occur both in the source material and in the article just as a consequence of the subject matter, even if the article is written in our own words. This is, in my view, not "close paraphrasing". We don't have to artificially alter our own prose just to avoid these coincidences.  Sandstein  16:09, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
I agree. I meant less those than:

The voice actors from the show reprise their role here for the game, and a large chunk of the game's music is taken from the show too. (source)

The voice actors from the TV series will reprise their roles, and much of the music is taken from the series also. (WP article)

The game uses the music and voice actors from the television series. (a suggestion)

The goal being less to jumble it around than to restructure the information czar ♔ 16:43, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
OK, I see what you mean. I've rephrased this as "The game will make use of the voice actors and the music of the TV series".  Sandstein  19:31, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
Hook checks out, good work, gtg czar ♔ 21:00, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
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