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The result was: promoted by PumpkinSky talk 11:30, 1 July 2012 (UTC)

Urbanisation in India

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Created/expanded by Barkha dhamechai (talk), Karthikndr (talk), Écrivain (talk). Nominated by Karthikndr (talk) at 12:16, 15 June 2012 (UTC)

  • My suggestion is for the hook to be a little more clearer like ALT ... that migration of people from Pakistan after the Partition of India is considered one of the causes for urbanisation in India? I've improved the grammar of the hook and inserted a few elements. --Rsrikanth05 (talk) 13:04, 15 June 2012 (UTC)

ALT hook sounds appropriate, Good to Go. New article, 5691 characters, hook size fine. -- ɑηsuмaη ʈ ᶏ ɭ Ϟ 13:14, 15 June 2012 (UTC)

  • I'm concerned that some of the phrasing in this article may be too close to that of its sources. Compare for example "Urbanisation is disturbing the equilibrium between demand and supply in the economic market resulting in larger demand and lesser supplies" with "Urbanization disturbs the equilibrium between demand and supply in the economic market, resulting in larger demands and lesser supplies", or "With so many people coming in each year, the cities are overcrowded forcing people to live in unsafe conditions which also includes illegal buildings" with "With so many people coming in, overcrowding forces many to live in unsafe conditions, including shacks and illegal buildings". Nikkimaria (talk) 04:23, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
    • I don't think the first concern can be changed, as those are typical economical words. Tweaked the second concern. -- ♪Karthik♫ ♪Nadar♫ 18:04, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
  • If you can't change it, even to a direct quote, then the article fails. That one's beyond close paraphrasing; it's effectively identical, and unacceptable in a DYK submission. BlueMoonset (talk) 21:57, 25 June 2012 (UTC)
  • Tweaked, present sentence shows no similarity to source. Écrivain (talk) 10:12, 26 June 2012 (UTC)
  • Better. There's still some closeness, for example in FNs 19 and 28 - could you do a bit more rephrasing there? Nikkimaria (talk) 18:48, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
  • Reworded 19. Tweaking 28 as much as I can. Hope it's alright. --Rsrikanth05 (talk) 10:44, 28 June 2012 (UTC)
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