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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 08:07, 9 April 2016 (UTC)

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Wave 1

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Created/expanded by EditorE (talk). Self-nominated at 22:17, 24 February 2016 (UTC).

  • Full review needed now that supplied QPQ is only used for this nomination. BlueMoonset (talk) 15:10, 7 March 2016 (UTC)
  • The article is new enough (newer than oldest unreviewed, as per guidelines) and long enough. It is neutrally written. I cannot find any obvious copyright violations, and the article has sufficient inline citations. I spot checked these, and they are fine. The QPQ is complete, although I would suggest that next time, you include a little more detail in your review; the promoter will find it helpful. However, I have some issues with this hook. First, it has odd links; it would seem that "Wave 1" is the EP, which has been linked twice, but you've bolded the second, piped link; while "Wave 1" is not actually the name of the artist, which is what your hook suggests. Also, it is slightly confusing; although it might make it slightly less interesting, I would suggest a plainer statement. I don't want to suggest an alternative, because another reviewer would then be required; instead, EditorE, if you could fix these issues in an ALT hook, I'll take another look at it. Vanamonde93 (talk) 22:03, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
    • ALT1 ... that while synthwave producer Com Truise was making his third extended play Wave 1, he didn't realize that it was really a reflection on the few months of his life before he started working on it?
  • ALT1 is certainly an improvement, in that you've fixed most of the issues with the formatting and linking. Still a little uncertain, though. Here's why; the portion following the comma comes from Com Truise himself, and is thus a primary sourced analytical claim that we are making in Wikipedia's voice. I know I'm pushing this a little, but we're nearly there; go even plainer, along the lines of "Com Truise made this, about which he said this." Regards, Vanamonde93 (talk) 02:44, 8 April 2016 (UTC)
    • ALT2 ... that producer Com Truise made Wave 1, which he said that he did not realize that it was really a reflection on the few months of his life before he started working on it?
  • ALT2 is fine in terms of content; therefore, I am going to propose ALT3, with only grammatical changes, which should not need a new reviewer. This should be GTG (with ALT3, unless you have objections to the wording change, Editor E?) Vanamonde93 (talk) 15:17, 8 April 2016 (UTC)
  • ALT3 ... that after synthwave producer Com Truise made his third extended play Wave 1, he said he had not realized it was really a reflection of the previous few months of his life?
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