Template talk:Did you know/Patrick Sullivan (American football executive)
Latest comment: 13 years ago by Crisco 1492
Patrick Sullivan (American football executive)
edit- The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Casliber (talk · contribs)
- ... that after the New England Patriots' 1985 Divisional Playoff victory over the Los Angeles Raiders, Raider Matt Millen hit Patriots General Manager Patrick Sullivan over the head with a football helmet.
Created by Hirolovesswords (talk). Self nom at 21:47, 5 August 2011 (UTC)
- Article length, history, and text issues all look ok to me. The hook is quite long and wordy, I would suggest trimming it to something along the lines of
- ... that a Los Angeles Raiders player hit New England Patriots General Manager Patrick Sullivan over the head with a football helmet after a game?
- I'd like to hear input from other editors, though, on whether this hook is appropriate. It seems to me that it's not really something interesting that he's done; more crucially, some might see this hook as focusing unduly on a negative event in a living person's life (especially since, from what the LAT source says, it sounds like Sullivan was being a bit of a jerk before this happened). rʨanaɢ (talk) 22:09, 5 August 2011 (UTC)
- ALT1:... that after a playoff win, New England Patriots General Manager Patrick Sullivan was hit with a football helmet by an opposing player?
- ALT2: ... that during the New England Patriots' 1985-86 playoff run, an opposing player hit General Manager Patrick Sullivan with a football helmet?
- These hooks are shorter and put more emphasis on the Patriots' victory and less on Sullivan being hit.--Hirolovesswords (talk) 03:50, 6 August 2011 (UTC)
ALT1 is good. Tick based off of Rjanag's review. Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:57, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
