User:KamGill/sandbox

Article Evaluation

• Neonatology

• Article is clear throughout the beginning, but towards the end it explains the cost of a maternal/neonatal infant stays and I don't think that was necessary to include.

• The article stays unbiased throughout,only states the facts of neonatology and does not state any opinions

• All of the links in the article work and the source does support the claims made in the article

• All facts are cited and come from neutral, factual sources

• When talking about the mean hospital costs of the average stay of an infant or mother, the data is from 2012 and has probably increased in the last 6 years

• I think the article should've included the training that neonatologist have to go through after they are out of school and the research aspect of neonatology.

• The talk page isn't very active at all on this article

• This article overall achieves the rhetorical objective and does a good job of informing the reader

Article Proposal and Bibliography

The article I would like to edit is Neonatology. The article could be improved by adding more in-depth information about the academic training and everyday life of a neonatologist. If a person is trying to learn more about a career in this field, they would not know all of the qualifications that is needed to pursue this job, based on the article as is. I think going into more detail could potentially help someone better understand all the aspects of this field.  I would also like to include the skills that a Neonatologist must embody, such as, emotional stability and quick thinking. Plus, I want to include better statistical information to the article, for example, the mortality rate for infants in the NICU and the average amount of time a premature or sick infant is in the NICU. Lastly, I plan on updating the stats that are already in the article.

Secondary sources

• Neonatology on the Web: Neonatology as a Career, www.neonatology.org/career/default.html.
• “Pediatric Neonatology .” CoPS, 22 Aug. 2013, www.pedsubs.org/SubDes/Neonatology.cfm.
• Decker, Fred. “The Average Salary of Neonatologists.” Chron.com, work.chron.com/average-salary-neonatologists-9804.html.
• “Default - Stanford Children's Health.” Stanford Children's Health - Lucile Packard Children's Hospital Stanford, www.stanfordchildrens.org/en/topic/default?id=the-neonatal-intensive-care-unit-nicu-90-P02389.
• How to Become a Neonatologist. doctorly.org/how-to-become-a-neonatologist/.

Notes

You seem to have most of what would need updated in the article. I agree that the statistical information needs updated it is a little out of date. I think you could also incorporate a graph or chart to show the statistics for more visual appeal to the article. And it might be beneficial to show some comparison of the US information to world wide information. You could if you haven't already look at some of the links on the talk page for some useful information.

Dr. Vetter's Feedback

Hi Kam, I think you've done a really nice job with this proposal and bibliography. I appreciate the specific ways you talk about how the article could be developed and improved. You do a nice job of thinking about reader needs (that is, what would a visitor to the article like to learn during their visit). I think your ideas for development are a wonderful start, and I would just recommend being open to finding other points of development as you explore your sources in more details. And that's the next step. Start looking at your sources with these particular gaps or needs in mind. Remember to use organizational devices such as Tables of Contents, indexes, and section headings to help you go straight to the information in the source (rather than reading the whole thing), and be open to finding new gaps or places where the article could be developed as you do this research. The goal for next week is to come to class having identified a few passages or places in your sources where you could bring that information into your Wikipedia article. We'll work on that in class by practicing summary and Wikipedia style. We'll talk more during our conference, but this is a great proposal! -Dr. Vetter

Article Draft

Daily Life  

The work of a neonatologist beings before the fetus is even born. They provide consultation to the mother of an unborn fetus who has known congenital anomalies which require preparation for the birth and coordination of services. Neonatologists will also be present during high risk deliveries, providing supportive care to infants straight out of the womb, in addition to the daily management of critically ill infants. Other than intensive care medicine and conducting technical procedures, they are counselors, helping families cope with the uncertainties that come along with unstable newborns and other ethical dilemmas.

Depending on the specific neonatology practice, each neonatologist has a structured scheduling model put in place to meet clinical needs and to provide the best care possible for their patients. For example, a neonatologist could work during the day and be on-call at night while a neonatal nurse practitioner or pediatrician covers the night shift. In a research practice, the neonatologists are most likely assigned to certain weeks of research and other weeks of covering the NICU.

With the career of Neonatologists being a hospital-based subspecialty, they usually work in a NICU within a birthing hospital or a free-standing Children’s Hospital, but the type of care they give to newborns can vary. The specific roles of a Neonatologists depend on the level of acuity of the definitive NICU. The most basic neonatal care is provided by the Level 1 NICU, which gives routine care to well-off newborns. Level II gives intermediate care for stable, non-mechanically or short term ventilated infants. Lastly, a Level III NICU is where surgical subspecialties are performed, mechanical ventilation and ECMO services are provided. Neonatologist typically practice in a group setting, which could include not only certified Neonatologists but residents and fellows in training. Neonatology is not only exclusive to working in a NICU, these doctors could engage in research based work which includes translational, clinical, epidemiological, and/or health services. Neonatologists might even work in educating medical students, fellows, residents, nurses, and physician assistants.

Neonatal Intensive Care Unit  

The Neonatal Intensive Care Unit or NICU for short is an area of the hospital completely devoted to caring for critically ill newborns and is usually completely separated from the nursery of healthy babies. The NICU includes a staff of trained health care professionals that provide specialized care for tiny patients. Most babies in this area are premature, have a medical condition that requires round-the-clock care, or have under average birth weights. Babies will stay in the NICU until they are healthy or strong enough to go, no matter how long it takes.

Compensation

Neonatologists significantly out-earn general pediatricians. The average pediatrician salary ranges from $161,000 to $229,000, whereas the average salary for a neonatologist is about $225,000 to $310,000 according to special issue of “Modern Healthcare” which conducted a salary survey on the medical world’s leading salaries.

Educational Path

Just like any other physician, to become a neonatologist you must first obtain a bachelor’s degree in order to learn the foundational and psychological theories. The effort that goes into studying the sciences at this level will give a good insight to the strenuous schedules that come with residency, internships and fellowships. After passing the MCAT (Medical College Admissions Test) students will move on to medical school where they will further expand their knowledge of the human body. Next, a perspective neonatologist will complete a three-year residency/internship program focused on pediatrics followed by a three-year neonatology fellowship. Lastly, they must become board certified by the American Board of Pediatrics or the American Osteopathic Board of Pediatrics.