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Comments on Second Draft

I think that you did a really good job at creating a concise paragraph. It does seem very technical, but I guess that is probably just part of your topic. You could maybe explain a little more on the 99% probability distribution thing, as that was slightly confusing. I like that you included the example of the lemur. Maybe try giving examples of proportional and actual LDD as well, if you have any. You did a good job at only including relevant information and making sure that your info is neutral. I think that the only thing you need to do is make it a little more readable for the average reader by adding examples! IsabellaGulino (talk) 06:08, 21 May 2017 (UTC)

Well done. Your article addition includes a great breadth of information from an impressive number of solid sources. Finding a clean division between actual and non-standard dispersal really helped to dig a bit deeper into the topic. The overall structure of the information was good, but it might help to improve the flow in reading if you begin by introducing the idea of these two different forms (eg "There are two forms of LDD. The first form is...". This could help the to prime the reader on the topic they are reading into. I was really interested to read the colorful example you gave for the non-standard form, but found it a bit confusing. It might help, here, to either carefully introduce the example or to find a more generalized example overall. One addition that might be worth making: specific morphological patterns have been noted concerning seeds more often involved in LDD (large seed size being the primary factor). Lastly, the sentence containing the non-standard dispersal example seems to have a typo. The addition of the word "on" between "ashore" and "the coastline" should remedy this. Great, informative article overall! Walkerka (talk) 04:57, 22 May 2017 (UTC)

Comments on Ideas Draft

It looks like you have a lot of specific ideas of how to improve these pages and found some resources. Several other students are interested in buzz pollination, so I can't guarantee that you can be assigned that one. Do you have any idea of the relative relevance of the articles that you were looking at? It sounds like the nutrient sensing article needs a lot of work and even one section could be chosen. We'll do some work on finding sources in class. Jmmcabee (talk) 16:27, 26 April 2017 (UTC)jmmcabee

Comments on Article Revision

Looks like you have some good sources of information. The paragraph seems a bit technical for your average reader. Can you sum up the relevance of LDD more briefly? I think you're supposed to avoid quotations in Wikipedia as well. Jmmcabee (talk)jmmcabee —Preceding undated comment added 18:51, 10 May 2017 (UTC)