User talk:Bienfaisance/sandbox

Bienfaisance's peer review

Overall, I found your contributions to the Advertising Slogan article necessary to the advancement of the topic and clearly worded. All information that should be cited is, and your sources are credible and appropriate. Whether or on purpose or simply by coincidence, it was a good idea to utilize sources from a range of times - not just ones from the 1990s or later 2000s. As you referenced in your sandbox section "Potential Contributions..." you clearly cleaned up the unrelated citations and reorganized the article into a more logical structure.

I particularly liked how you introduced a new section - Format of Advertising Slogans - to describe the typical visual layout of a slogan. This really helps the reader picture what you are talking about, but I have one suggestion to take this addition a step further: insert examples of advertising slogans that follow the different formats (funny, musical jingles, etc.) that you describe.

The most important thing you could do in order to improve the article would be add examples of slogans that have been adopted by the public. I can think of a few that have become very popular and commonplace. Even further, you could reference how some of them have been adopted into meme culture, such as edits of Tide Pods and Hot Pockets. This will corroborate your points that slogans linked to commonplace topics are likely to be adopted and that they have a notable influence in everyday social interactions. Ericabeth (talk) 21:15, 4 March 2018 (UTC)