User talk:Brenda le11/sandbox

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For the first section, another note that might be worth mentioning is the fact that as women become more and more involved in the work force, the more people that are a part of the working class. In addition, women are educating themselves more which means that they are less likely to have children. These women can provide for themselves and are therefore better able to make family planning decisions. Therefore, less children in general and more women working would decrease the dependency ratio of a specified country. Also, you do not need to reference the article after each sentence, just once at the end of the paragraph. The last thing I might add to your edits would be providing an example of a country that faces one of the problems you mentioned. Sometimes it makes the information easier to understand if they can think of a place to relate the statistics to. Japan would be a great example for the aging population or Rwanda for an example of a country with a large young population (youth bulge). Most people have heard of these countries, so it should help give them a visualization of the real effects of the dependency ratio. Other than those couple suggestion, your tone is neutral and very informative! Cites:

Pettinger, Tejvan. “Dependency Ratio.” Economics Help, www.economicshelp.org/blog/glossary/dependency-ratio/.

Pradhan, Elina. “Female Education and Childbearing: A Closer Look at the Data.” Investing in Health, 3 Dec. 2015, blogs.worldbank.org/health/female-education-and-childbearing-closer-look-data.

Thank you so much for the feedback! Those were some great ideas and I added them to my article to make it stronger. Thanks for your help! Brenda le11 (talk) 17:14, 3 April 2018 (UTC)