User talk:Burgherben/sandbox

Latest comment: 7 years ago by ChristinaDaniels in topic Peer Review

I think that your lead is informative, and formatted well. My suggestion is to maybe be more specific when stating how many villages speak the language rather than saying a handful. Also your examples in the number section were good, but putting information about grammar before examples may have a better flow. I am sure you are still working on your page and just haven't gotten there yet. I have not gotten very far either!

Katie acc (talk) 02:46, 7 April 2017 (UTC)Katie AccordinoReply

added specific number of villages (according to source), thanks for your input

Peer Review

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I edited your Helong section briefly to fix some grammar issues. I reformatted one sentence because it seemed grammatically incorrect and added in a few words. I think you provided a good summary of Helong and the reason it has become “vulnerable”. You mention a dialect of Malay, but I think it would be helpful if you listed the name of the particular dialect (if a name exists). Also, I removed some hyperlinks you had in place because you had already hyperlinked the item previously. I changed one of your subheadings from “Letters” to “Phonology” to fit with the suggested Language Template. Based on the Language Template, I would suggest making subsections such as Classification, History, Grammar, Vocabulary and the Writing System, if you have information that is relevant to these subsections. I think your section on numbers is very informative and I like the flow of that section. As you add in more information, the article will become more structured. ChristinaDaniels (talk) 16:54, 7 April 2017 (UTC)Reply

added specific dialect (along with link to that dialects page), and agree with your change to Phonology, thank you for your input