User talk:QuietSisyphus/Graph C*-algebra

Hi QuietSisyphus, Ian is out today so he asked me to look this over.

• An article should be composed of the lead and the body. The lead should be a synopsis or abstract of the rest of the article, and thus should not contain any information not contained in the body.
• Several paragraphs lack citations of any kind. Where is this information coming from? Related to above, content in the lead doesn't necessarily have to be cited as long as the content it presents is present and cited in the body.
• Wikipedians generally see it as a red flag if paragraphs or sections end without a citation
• A small note on reference formatting: References come immediately after punctuation, with no space separating the reference and punctuation. I see at least one instance of a reference coming before a comma, not after. Also, multiple references used consecutively are not separated with a space, as in your second paragraph.
• It's encouraged to make technical articles as understandable as possible (more about that here with suggestions). I think more effort can be placed into making this an encyclopedia article for a general audience.
• Another piece of advice is to gloss explanation of jargon after use. Even if a term is linked, it is still helpful to add a short explanation of the term in simpler words, which is often done parenthetically. The idea with links is that a reader shouldn't have to click a link to understand the meaning of a sentence.
• It could be good to have an "Impact", "Significance", or "Applications" section in this article to provide the reader context with why this particular algebra is important
• Watch out for relative or unclear time references ("...much of the early work on graph C*-algebras..."; "Even in modern work...") when is early? when is modern?
• This clause could use some cleanup "consequently, much of the early literature, in which row-finite graphs are considered exclusively, only conditions (CK1) and (CK2) are listed." I think you may mean "consequently, much of the early literature, in which row-finite graphs are considered exclusively, only list conditions (CK1) and (CK2)." but I may be wrong
• Section titles shouldn't be redundant with the article title. Therefore, your section title can just be "Examples" rather than "Examples of graph C*-algebras"

Let me know if you have questions about any of this feedback! My two biggest concerns rely on verifiability (more references can be added) and understandability to a more general audience as much as possible. Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:05, 15 October 2019 (UTC)