User talk:RachelPWendt/sandbox

For Ellen: The aim of Wikipedia is to present balanced information. You should cover all aspects, but do so neutrally. Regarding sources, if it's not on Google Scholar, it probably doesn't exist. If you can't find something, alter your search terms. Once you find a source, you can order it through Interlibarary Loan. If they want to charge you for this, let me know. J.R. Council (talk) 04:12, 7 March 2016 (UTC)
For Rachel: I don't think you need an image. Anything that comes to mind is just a cliche. I think your outline is fine. Not too much at all. J.R. Council (talk) 04:12, 7 March 2016 (UTC)
For Alyssa: I don't see any contribution from you. If you were working on another page, please move your work to the sandbox so I can grade it. J.R. Council (talk) 21:10, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

To-Do List

To-Do List for Endogenous Depression Article:
1. Compile a list of sources.

• I suggest each person find at least 1 or 2 for their section. More if needed.

2. Research information regarding:

• Definition (a lot of this is already in the article, but we can expand some more if needed). --- I, Ellen, would be happy to expand on this information Ellenhonsa (talk) 13:28, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
• Risk Factors.
• Symptoms--I, Rachel, can do this part!! RachelPWendt (talk) 03:24, 21 March 2016 (UTC) .
• Prevalence.--I, Ellen, would can look up prevalence rates and will include seeking information on race, gender, age, and culture. Ellenhonsa (talk) 13:28, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
• Treatment/Prognosis--I, Rachel, can also look up some treatment options! Might be good to have a variety, though. RachelPWendt (talk) 03:24, 21 March 2016 (UTC) .

3. Delegate sections to each group member.
4. Write a rough-draft.
5. Add individual sections to page for further group-editing.--group-editing should play a large part in this project. I believe it is important we all agree on what we are added to the page and are confident in each others work. Ellenhonsa (talk) 13:28, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
6. Proofread/polish article.
7. Submit for approval.
RachelPWendt (talk) 18:49, 16 March 2016 (UTC)

Definition:

• Already in article: Endogenous Depression is an atypical sub-class of the mood disorder, major depressive disorder (clinical depression). Endogenous depression includes patients with treatment-resistant, non-psychotic, major depressive disorder, characterized by abnormal behavior of the endogenous opioid system but not the monoaminergic system.[1][2] (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Endogenous_depression). RachelPWendt (talk) 19:09, 16 March 2016 (UTC)

History:

• Already in article: "Endogenous depression was initially considered valuable as a means of diagnostic differentiation with reactive depression. While the latter's onset could be attributed to adverse life events and treated with talk therapy, the former would indicate treatment with antidepressants.[3] Indeed, this view of endogenous depression is at the root of the popular view that mood disorders are a reflection of a 'chemical imbalance' in the brain. More recent research has shown that the probability of an endogenous depression patient experiencing an adverse life event prior to a depressive episode is roughly the same as for a reactive depression patient and the efficacy of antidepressant therapy bears no statistical correlation with the patient's diagnostic classification along this axis.[4]" (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Endogenous_depression). RachelPWendt (talk) 19:09, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
  
• We could possible expand on the history and add more details Ellenhonsa (talk) 13:33, 21 March 2016 (UTC)

Symptoms:

• Possibly reference DSM-5 information. RachelPWendt (talk) 19:09, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
• Detailed explanations on what symptoms look like so users have a good picture of what is required to obtain a diagnosis for this type of depressionEllenhonsa (talk) 13:35, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
• How these symptoms differ from other types of depressionEllenhonsa (talk) 13:35, 21 March 2016 (UTC)

Risk Factors:

• Environmental. RachelPWendt (talk) 19:09, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
• Genetic. RachelPWendt (talk) 19:09, 16 March 2016 (UTC)

Prevalence:

• Age. RachelPWendt (talk) 19:09, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
• Male vs. Female. RachelPWendt (talk) 19:09, 16 March 2016 (UTC) ---add information on which gender has highest prevalence and possible causes to this Ellenhonsa (talk) 13:30, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
• Race/Culture (which group has highest prevelance and possible causes) Ellenhonsa (talk) 13:30, 21 March 2016 (UTC)

Treatment and Prognosis:

• Current treatment (research done on it, how it is preformed, outcomes, success rates) Ellenhonsa (talk) 13:32, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
• Possible future treatment Ellenhonsa (talk) 13:32, 21 March 2016 (UTC)

References:

1. Nyhuis-P-W, Specka-M, Gastpar-M (2006). "Does the antidepressive response to opiate treatment describe a subtype of depression?". European Neuropsychopharmacology 16 (S4). doi:10.1016/S0924-977X(06)70328-5.
2. Bodkin, JA; Zornberg, GL; Lukas, SE; Cole, JO (February 1995). "Harvard Medical School Clinical Study "Buprenorphine treatment of refractory depression."". Journal of Clinical Psychopharmacology 15 (1): 49–57. doi:10.1097/00004714-199502000-00008. PMID 7714228.
3. Kramer, T (2002). "Endogenous Versus Exogenous: Still Not the Issue". Medscape Psychopharmacology Today. 7 1.
4. Watkins, JT; Leber WR; Imber SD; Collins JF; Elkin I; Pilkonis PA; Sotsky SM; Shea MT; Glass DR (1993). "Temporal Course Of Change Of Depression". Journal of Consulting & Clinical Psychology. 5 61 (858): 64. doi:10.1037/0022-006x.61.5.858.

RachelPWendt (talk) 19:09, 16 March 2016 (UTC)

1. Iznak, A. F., Tiganov, A. S., Iznak, E. V., Sorokin, S. A., & Pogosyants, I. (2013). EEG correlates and possible predictors of the efficacy of the treatment of endogenous depression. Human Physiology, 39(4), 378-385. doi:10.1134/S0362119713040063
2. Andrus, B. M., Blizinsky, K., Vedell, P. T., Dennis, K., Shukla, P. K., Schaffer, D. J., & ... Redei, E. E. (2012). Gene expression patterns in the hippocampus and amygdala of endogenous depression and chronic stress models. Molecular Psychiatry, 17(1), 49-61. doi:10.1038/mp.2010.119
3. American Psychiatric Association. (2013). Diagnostic and statistical manual of mental disorders: DSM-5. Washington, D.C.: American Psychiatric Association.

Ellenhonsa (talk) 13:40, 21 March 2016 (UTC)

Dr. Council's comments on Assignment 5

First, some general comments. Please note: The instructions said to do Assignment 5 on the sandbox page, and I would comment on the sandbox/talk page. If you do your work in the main sandbox page, it will help keep things straight. That said, great job, group! I am very impressed with how complete and well organized this is already. I can see that you've been working on properly formatting your article for Wikipedia. Good idea - you will need to do this eventually, and might as well start now.
Comments on specific sections:

1. To-do list: Looks good. Appropriate level of detail for now - you'll be adding more.
2. Outline: I meant for groups to do a proper outline, like this:

I. Main topic

A. Subtopic

1. Sub-sub topic,etc.

However, your approach of outlining using Wikipedia headings makes sense. As you are developing your article, it still might help to use a traditional outline under each topic heading for organization.

• Although there is a fair amount of material in the article already, it looks like there is a lot of potential for development. Be sure to fact-check the existing article.

1. References: Reference citations are not formatted properly for Wikipedia. As you add text later, be sure to use the drop-down menu to attach reference citations in appropriate places and format references properly.
2. Task commitments: Good job on this as well. It is easier to coordinate in a small group like yours. J.R. Council (talk) 17:12, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

Dr. Council's comments on Assignment 6

Nice work! It won't take much at all to combine your work into a really good lead section. I agree with the ideas Rachel proposed in her feedback. J.R. Council (talk) 21:32, 5 April 2016 (UTC)

Dr. Council's comments on Assignment 7

Excellent! You are good to go on to develop your main article. Just a couple of comments:

1. I like that you've put citations in.
2. You should add some internal links. J.R. Council (talk) 02:49, 13 April 2016 (UTC)

Dr. Council's comments on Assignment 8

Great job on this, Group 11. It is virtually ready to be published to the main article space. I did one minor edit where you used the wrong word - foremost vs. forefront. Here is my feedback on specific sections:

• Treatment and Prognosis:

1. I don't think that ECT is all that common a treatment for depression.
2. You say: "practitioners avoid the use of CBT in young adolescents due to rates of injury" Don't you really mean ECT?
3. This section doesn't actually say anything about prognosis. Maybe just title the section "Treatment."

• References: References like this are not correct - "CAS – Central Authentication Service". web.a.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.lib.ndsu.nodak.edu. Retrieved 2016-03-30.

Please put in proper reference citations in your reference list wherever you now have CAS.

Once you take care of these issues, I'll notify Ian at Wiki Ed and he will vet this for final publication. J.R. Council (talk) 20:16, 21 April 2016 (UTC)
Thank you for the feedback, Ellen and I have applied the changes and are moving the article into the main space RachelPWendt (talk) 18:41, 28 April 2016 (UTC)

Feedback

Very nice work here. I made a few stylistic changes in keeping with Wikipedia's style manual- references are supposed to go after the punctuation, not before, and only proper nouns are supposed to be capitalized. One other issue that's a bit more important - a lot of your sources are very old - some even from the 1960s. Generally speaking, articles should reflect current thinking about topics - things may not have changed in the last 50 years, but in a lot of cases, they have. So it's better to use newer sources that might reflect developments in the last several decades. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:24, 28 April 2016 (UTC)

• Sounds like you're ready to publish. It's up to you whether to make the changes Ian suggests. He doesn't seem to be insisting on them. Before you move the article to mainspace, be sure to read the instructions following Assignment 9. J.R. Council (talk) 02:56, 4 May 2016 (UTC)