User talk:Slibera1/sandbox

This is a great start! Please revise following the outstanding reviews. You need to have 5 references and they should be cited correctly. Please see wikipedia handouts in the wikipedia folder on blackboard for more information. Also, please only include information found in the references cited, some of the more general information is not necessary. Please contact me if you have any questions - nice work! --Amille75 (talk) 06:01, 7 December 2015 (UTC)

My general takeaway from this article is that the plant Elymus elymoides faces many competitive forces from different invasive species and in some situations this can result in a decrease in fitness. I liked how you start off with a general overview of the genus by saying that it is considered to be the most economically important family in modern cultures.

Some parts of the entry did not flow as well as I think they could. For example, in the second paragraph you say “Because Elymus elymoides populations decline when introduced to certain populations, squirreltail may benefit more from a monoculture setting.” What exactly is squirreltail? If you can elaborate more on what that is I think the sentence would flow better.

For grammar you need to make sure to italicize the species name. Also, the sentence “This is seen in the Great Basin Desert, as the dry environment makes water a limiting resource, resulting in competition over it” sounds a bit off to me so you might want to go back and try to reword it so it flows better. Besides those two things I thought the rest of the grammar was fine.

Your citations look pretty good but I think we are supposed to have five sources so you might want to try to find another one to add in there somewhere.

Overall great job! I enjoyed reading your contribution!

-Melissa Saele

1. General comments

• The main idea of this article seems to be that the species Elymus elymoides is a type of wild rye that suffers from intense competition with other species for nearby resources. • I liked the ideas and the information that you were trying to discuss. It seems relevant to food production, which is the main point of this project. • Something that you could work on is the overall flow of the submission. The sentences are choppy and do not seem to be building off one of another. • You mention squirreltail in the second paragraph without referring to it previously. Could you clarify what you mean by “squirreltail may benefit more from a monoculture setting”?

2. Grammar

• You have several grammar mistakes here and there in the article. You use the word “experiences” a few times, and they may be a better word to use in place of this one. • You need to add a “to” between the words selection and act in the statement, “leading natural selection act negatively on Elymus elymoides.” • There are many places were better word choice/more flow of the sentences could allow for an overall better article. Also, some sentences were awkwardly phrased, such as “When introduced, crested wheatgrass negatively affects Elymus elymoides when mature, despite being able to effectively compete at the seedling.” • “Antoher”—I am assuming you meant another. • The article doesn’t flow very smoothly, and the ideas do not connect because of this. • You are missing some small words here and there throughout the article. I would recommend going back and adding these to make it flow better. • Make sure to italicize the species name.

3. References

• There are only four sources, so you still need to add one more scientific source. • The sources seem like they are from reputable scientific journals/textbooks. The only thing to point out is that in sources 3 and 4, there is something called “template”, and I’m not sure what this is referring to/if it is needed.

Overall, good job on getting the essential information into this submission. There are a few grammar mistakes that need some attention, but besides that, this was an interesting read! Great job!

~Divya Kodali

General Comments Overall the take home message was that Elymus elymoides may be better grown alone instead of with other plants that cause it to complete for water and nutrients, although can have a negative impact on soil quality if grown alone. Maybe try to find a positive interaction between elymus elymoides and another species. Grammer definitely need to italicize the species and genus name (however, this is done in the main article, will need updating in sandbox. References Only 4, check the two sources that start out with template. Overall seems on the short side, need to work on flow between the paragraphs and check how it flows in the main article.