User talk:Tcs366/New sandbox

Week 9 Feedback Exercise

Hi there,

I had to read through your article a few times before I could find a flaw to bring to your attention. The article is well organized, clearly written and properly cited. The only problem I found was in the binomial/scientific names of the cat and horse (I think that's all), the genus names are supposed to be capitalized and the species names are in lowercase even in a title. Both genus and species are supposed to be in italics as well. Making these changes would improve the article by staying with the generally accepted nomenclature and formatting and increasing the perceived reputability of the author/editor. Those are just nit-picky things though, great work!

Cheers, Jason

Jawarner85 (talk) 00:32, 5 November 2018 (UTC)

Tcs366 Peer Review

The article is well written with lots of information present, however, it wasn't easy to spot the changes you'd made from the original article. Highlighting additions made to the article or sentences rearranged would help a bit to see the changes. The introduction section is well written, concise and outlines what you'd be discussing well. Your idea to make domestication into it's on section was a good call and as its an important part of your topic. The only possible suggestion I have for this section is that you maybe add a line or so on interspecies communication just because its one of the things you discuss later on in the article and it'll give the reader a brief introduction or idea as to what you'll be discussing further in the article. This section also only has one citation and I think it can benefit from a few more citations. The next section "friendship between humans and animals" is also well done and you provided a few examples of both domesticated and non-domesticated friendships which helps with the balance of the article. I would suggest that for the dog example that you expand and provide an example if possible on what you mean by separation and reunion incidences. You should define what you mean by approach latency and talk about how it and the frequency of physical contacts changes depending on how familiar the dog is with the person (i.e does it increase with familiarity?). " lip licking, body shaking and vocalization also indicate this", it will be better for the sake of clarity that you state what "this" means as I had to go back a few lines to find out what you were referring to. Your next two examples on cats and horses were well written, I only suggest that you try to add at least one other citation from a different source for each example. The "Friendships between non-human animals" section is a great addition and provides lots of examples, I can't see anything in particular that can be improved except perhaps adding one more citation from a different source for the dog example if possible. The only suggestion I can offer for the "Why interspecies friendships form" section is that you add another citation from a different source for the protection and social bonding sections just to have a different source supporting your case. Your article is great and its an interesting topic, I think it just needs a few tweaks to be perfect :-).TallGuy117 (talk) 20:14, 7 November 2018 (UTC)TallGuy117.