User talk:Twillak98/sandbox

Matthew's Peer Review

Twilla,

Some of the information needs to be linked to their respective Wikipedia articles, such as the list of counties in the introduction section of the page and various other portions of your article. I would also personally recommend that you write the "History" section in paragraph form rather than list form as it will be more concise and clear to read. Your "References" section of your article also needs to be reformated into a list format with hyperlinks. It may also be possible to expand on the "Controversy" section of the article to give a more broad overview of the controversies regarding sanctuary cities. Overall, your article is neutral and factual rather than opinionated, while also giving an informative overview of sanctuary cities in Pennsylvania. You also do a good job at keeping the article focused on sanctuary cities in Pennsylvania instead of trailing off onto other topics. Your "Lead Section" is also concise, objective, and informative.

Erin's Peer Review

Your article looks great! The timeline looks professional and you cited your sources. I especially appreciate the "Controversy" portion where you discuss defunding. I would just add some hyperlinks to "ICE" wiki page and maybe some names of government officials/former government officials like Pat Toomey and Donald Trump. — Preceding unsigned comment added by ErinMacLeod (talk • contribs) 18:27, 11 April 2018 (UTC)

Riane's Peer Review

Your article looks very well done. The timeline of events was a nice touch. All of your information appears to be neutral and documented. Overall I'd say that there isn't really anything to change that I can see. Well done! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Riane97 (talk • contribs) 13:51, 13 April 2018 (UTC)