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editHello, Zoemes20, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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Some editing tips
editHello Zoe and thank you for contributing to Wikipedia. At the Energy drink page, I noticed some formatting errors which I can point out to you here with the hope you'll be able to improve your editing quality for the encyclopedia. I admire your background and career ambitions, so am open to helping you.
- formatting a reference. Here is Citer which can format references quickly for you. If you use the medical literature listing, PubMed, just enter the pmid or pmc number. In my experience, the DOI works best.
- repeat use of a reference is accomplished by using WP:REFNAME. Give the source a name, such as Cite error: A
<ref>tag is missing the closing</ref>(see the help page). Youth is often the targeted age group as seen in a survey covered in 2015 on youth from the ages of 12 to 24, 80% of respondents reported that most energy drink ads can be seen on “television (58.8%), posters or signs in convenience or grocery stores(48.5%), and online ads(45.7%)”.[1]
Zoemes20 (talk) 14:18, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
- So I actually edited all of my posts and was wondering if you could take a look at them, thanks. Posted below:
Misconceptions
editMany people consume energy drinks as a source of energy. These beverages can be consumed to help warrant off sleep deprivation and exhaustion. Nevertheless, these beverages are often abused for the extra energy they provide, which consumers believe will be a sort of “high”, which is actually the [Sugar Rush] that consumers experience after consumption. [1] As a result of this it is often assumed that because these drinks are so widely consumed they will actually have an effect on the amount of energy one may have, leading many to believe that "energy drinks have a 'high' or 'dangerous' amount of caffeine, [2] which is a common misconception. In reality most energy drinks contain significantly less caffeine than the average cup of coffee.[3] With this information it is easy to say that they can be dangerous, but if consumed excessively or against medical advice.
- As stated in my reversion of this edit, the impression this content gives is one of being "on a soapbox", WP:SOAP, as opposed to a conclusion from strong reviews, which are not present. I would say this is unencyclopedic and not usable. --Zefr (talk) 14:52, 2 August 2019 (UTC)
References
- ^ Marczinski, Cecile A.; Fillmore, Mark T.; Maloney, Sarah F.; Stamates, Amy L. (2017). "Faster self-paced rate of drinking for alcohol mixed with energy drinks versus alcohol alone". Psychology of Addictive Behaviors. 31 (2). American Psychological Association (APA): 154–161. doi:10.1037/adb0000229. ISSN 1939-1501.
- ^ Curran, Christine Perdan; Marczinski, Cecile A. (2017-12-01). "Taurine, caffeine, and energy drinks: Reviewing the risks to the adolescent brain". Birth Defects Research. 109 (20). Wiley: 1640–1648. doi:10.1002/bdr2.1177. ISSN 2472-1727.
- ^ Lisko, Joseph G.; Lee, Grace E.; Kimbrell, J. Brett; Rybak, Michael E.; Valentin-Blasini, Liza; Watson, Clifford H. (2016-07-25). "Caffeine Concentrations in Coffee, Tea, Chocolate, and Energy Drink Flavored E-liquids". Nicotine & Tobacco Research. Oxford University Press (OUP): ntw192. doi:10.1093/ntr/ntw192. ISSN 1462-2203.
Effects
editEnergy drinks could be causing some major damage to the community consuming them: Youth. As the youth continues to consume more and more sugar they are being provided with more health issues such as "Type 2 Diabetes", "Cavities", "Early onset rheumatoid arthritis", "Heartsease, heart attacks, and strokes", and so much more. [1] Typically these are issues that come around later in life, which are now affecting the youth of today's society.
- The BMJ review concludes that "More research is needed to explore the short-term and long-term impacts in all spheres, including health, behaviour and education", indicating that this research is not well-enough developed to include in an encyclopedia. Not usable. --Zefr (talk) 14:52, 2 August 2019 (UTC)
References
- ^ Visram, Shelina; Cheetham, Mandy; Riby, Deborah M; Crossley, Stephen J; Lake, Amelia A (2016). "Consumption of energy drinks by children and young people: a rapid review examining evidence of physical effects and consumer attitudes". BMJ Open. 6 (10): e010380. doi:10.1136/bmjopen-2015-010380. ISSN 2044-6055. PMC 5073652. PMID 27855083.
Demographic
editYouth is often the targeted age group as seen in a survey covered in 2015 on youth from the ages of 12 to 24, 80% of respondents reported that most energy drink ads can be seen on television , posters or signs in convenience or grocery stores, and online ads. [1] Zoemes20 (talk) 16:43, 1 August 2019 (UTC)Zoemes20 (talk) 17:14, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
- This edit looks hurried, with little care for English composition, spacing, or WP:REFPUNCT. If you're here just to post an edit for a class credit, then please don't bother, as it requires other editors to clean up your careless editing. We're writing for an international audience, so please don't use words like "ad" - it is an article on Wikipedia, linkable to advertisement. Think of your audience as a high school student in a developing country of Africa, just learning to read English -- we want our editing to be as close to perfect English as possible. The research is not a review, and -- I do not expect you to know this -- the MDPI journal is considered predatory, meaning the authors actually pay the journal to publish their work, usually without editorial review. Wikipedia frowns on this practice; WP:SOURCEWATCH. --Zefr (talk) 14:52, 2 August 2019 (UTC)
References
- ^ Wiggers, Danielle; Asbridge, Mark; Baskerville, N.; Reid, Jessica; Hammond, David (2019-02-21). "Exposure to Caffeinated Energy Drink Marketing and Educational Messages among Youth and Young Adults in Canada". International Journal of Environmental Research and Public Health. 16 (4). MDPI AG: 642. doi:10.3390/ijerph16040642. ISSN 1660-4601. PMC 6406860. PMID 30795611.
{{cite journal}}: CS1 maint: unflagged free DOI (link)
Yes, using the DOI with Citer produced the correct format for your references. It is useful to add the pmid, pmc and/or URL (last two not always available) numbers into the formatted reference, as I did under "Effects" and "Demographic". This helps users see more information. See the reference details now, then compare them to your version. --Zefr (talk) 03:42, 2 August 2019 (UTC)
Talk page formatting
editHi Zoe -- something happened to your previous edit, and content was lost. Be sure to check an edit in "show preview" before saving the edit to make sure everything looks like you want it. You should go back to your edit and copy/paste what you intended to have to restore all the previous content. Also, your talk page (or sandbox) is a place to practice editing for the article, including reference formatting. You are not using the Citer tool I gave you (PubMed is not a reference by itself). Fyi: You can provide a PubMed abstract on a talk page by using this format: PMID 30795611. This study PMID 30770983 is primary research, so is not useable. I'll check back later to see your progress. --Zefr (talk) 15:08, 1 August 2019 (UTC)