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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by David Fuchs via FACBot (talk) 2 February 2024 [1].

Operation Unokat

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Nominator(s): Lankyant (talk) 01:11, 28 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about the 1961 UN peacekeeping offensive against forces of the seccionist State of Katanga during the Congo Crisis. The article is well written and structured, informative and I believe comes to a FA standard. Lankyant (talk) 01:11, 28 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Image review
No, that licensing is not correct. This is an AP (US company) photograph by a German photographer, so it is unlikely that Swedish copyright rules apply. (t · c) buidhe 00:55, 10 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]
oh heck. Okay let me try again. I need one for the infobox would this be acceptable? [4]
I will remove the rest Lankyant (talk) 00:58, 10 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Buidhe pictures removed. Lankyant (talk) 00:59, 10 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]
That one should be ok (t · c) buidhe 01:52, 10 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Picture added and all the problem ones removed. Thank you so much Lankyant (talk) 01:55, 10 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from HAL

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A personal interest of mine - I'm claiming a spot here. If I don't return after a reasonable time, please ping me. ~ HAL333 21:43, 11 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

HAL333 Ping! Gog the Mild (talk) 19:36, 18 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, better late than never:

  • Should "central Africa" be capitalized? As it is on its own entry?
  • "A number of skirmishes with UN forces in the Katangese capital Élisabethville and the establishment of roadblocks by the Katangese to cut off and limit the movement of UN forces within the city called for military action" is a bit overlong.
  • However, the agreement would not be carried out --- >"However, the agreement was not carried out" per WP:WOULDCHUCK
  • was brought in to provide --> "was sent to provide" for concision.
  • The United States also wanted reintegration to be achieved for this end --> something like "The United States also desired reintegration for this end"
  • The US and USSR are not wikilinked, although other countries are.
  • "Tshombe secured Urquhart's released"
  • If the UN is abbreviated, why not do so with the United States?
  • "have to take action against them" - "against them" is redundant
  • "UN officials came to believe that" --> "UN officials concluded that" for concision again
  • The captain beginning with "A Ferret armoured car formerly..." does not need a full stop
  • "It also had been reinforced" - what is 'it' referring to?
  • "At the request of Thant" --> "At Thant's request"
  • "destroying a dummy of" - clarify

Nice work. ~ HAL333 22:28, 1 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Done the above changes, thank you Lankyant (talk) 03:33, 2 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Coordinator note

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This has been open for more than four weeks and has yet to pick up a support. Unless it attracts considerable movement towards a consensus to promote over the next two or three days I am afraid that it is liable to be archived. Gog the Mild (talk) 20:28, 29 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

SC

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Putting down a marker: I'll review shortly. - SchroCat (talk) 11:16, 6 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prelude
  • "On 28 November members": I think you should add the year in here too – it's a new section and as a prelude, it could have been any time before the action started.
  • "assaulted UN Representative in Katanga": -> assaulted the UN Representative in Katanga"
  • I'm not sure what variant of English this is in: you seem to be using Commonwealth British (you have "authorisation", "realised", "travelled" and multiple others), but then you have the US spellings "signaled" "armored" and "fueling". Consistency is key throughout, and it may be advantageous to add a tag to the top to stop people swapping spellings later
Initial actions
  • 'enact a "scorched-earth policy".': I'm not sure you need the quotes on this – they come across as scare quotes with just the three words
  • "a patrol sent out to locate their position but was unsuccessful.": the grammar has gone a little awry here

Done to the start of "UN offensive"; more to follow. Interesting article so far, nicely written with the right balance between big picture and detail. – SchroCat (talk) 14:14, 10 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Done everything above! Lankyant (talk) 14:43, 10 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support. Nothing more from me on the rest (I made only MOS tweak to save having to hold up the review for that to be done), and I'm happy that—from a prose point of view—this meets the FA criteria. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 19:12, 10 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Dudley

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  • "Operation Morthor and the death of UN General Secretary Dag Hammarskjöld had led to a ceasefire between UN and Katangese forces earlier in the year." The main text does not mention a ceasefire after Hammarskjöld's death.
Apologies, I did a poor job on a lack of sleep! I believe I have addressed it now, but please check for me. Would take suggestions on how to reword it.Lankyant (talk) 03:08, 8 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Source review(ish)

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Reviewing this version and spot-check upon request. It seems like source formatting is consistent and nothing jumps out as unreliable or questionable. Keep in mind that this isn't a field where I am deeply familiar with, though. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 08:09, 10 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Jo-Jo, any chance of a first-timer's plagiarism review and source to text integrity spotcheck? Gog the Mild (talk) 17:57, 12 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Not without a number of screenshots, since most sauces are offline:

  • 4 Can I have a copy of the article? The TimesMachine does not work.
added a link Lankyant (talk) 19:53, 12 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]
It doesn't seem to work? Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 08:40, 21 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]
it's there at the bottom of the first column highlighted. Got the job done by 2:30pm. Lankyant (talk) 19:53, 12 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 19:10, 12 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Given the lack of progress in the source review and the length this has been open, the nomination is being archived. Serial's comments above are germane—nominators should be expected to speak to the content and address points brought up by reviewers in a timely manner. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs talk 20:32, 2 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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