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List of World Heritage Sites in Senegal

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List of World Heritage Sites in Senegal (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)

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Nominator(s): Tone 08:26, 19 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Senegal has seven WHS and five tentative sites. Standard style. The other nomination, for Ecuador, is already seeing some support so I am adding a new nomination. Tone 08:26, 19 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Alavense

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  • and second time because of - A second time? The second time? There are two instances of this, both in the lede and in the table.
  • the French under which slavery was abolished - the French, under which slavery was abolished
  • Why are manatees linked, but not crocodiles?
  • each circle contains between eight and fourteen of them - I think containing would fit better.
  • has been inhabited for at least two millennia by societies who engaged with fishing and shellfish gathering - When did they stop engaging with fishing and gathering?
    • I modified the text, does it make more sense now?
  • Link Aéropostale (aviation).
  • I think the mention to Argentina is unnecessary.
    • I clarified that the line was from Senegal to Argentina, so it seems relevant enough. Also, Aéropostale (aviation) is already linked in the name, so I avoided repetition.
  • The French established a trading post in 1836, it later developed in the regional capital until being replaced by Ziguinchor in 1904 - I would go for either The French established a trading post in 1836, which later developed or The French established a trading post in 1836 – it later developed.
  • These earthen buildings were once common in the region, today only some have been preserved - These earthen buildings were once common in the region, but today only some have been preserved
  • for its colour which ranges - for its colour, which ranges

That's what I saw, Tone. Kind regards, Alavense (talk) 09:04, 19 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Alavense: Done, thanks! --Tone 15:48, 19 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I'm happy with the edits and the replies. I added this as well. Nice work, as always. Support. Alavense (talk) 15:54, 19 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
MPGuy2824
  • "The Djoudj National Bird Sanctuary was listed as endangered twice, from 1984 to 1988 and from 2000 to 2006; the first time because of the risks posed by the planned construction of a dam downstream, and a second time because of the spread of the invasive plant Salvinia molesta."
  • "because of low mammal populations, managements problems, and the planned construction of a dam on the Gambia river"
@MPGuy2824: Fixed, thanks! --Tone 15:48, 19 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Adding more now since it is less confusing after you've incorporated Alavense's points:
  • "first time" -> "the first time". One instance in the lead and one more in the table. - Alavense had pointed this out too. Also add a semicolon before this part of the sentence.
  • "finally the French, under which" -> "under whom".
  • I understand your point about being unsure if they mean the Nile crocodile or the West African crocodile, but maybe you could link to the common genus.
  • "home to substantial population" -> "home to a substantial population" OR "home to substantial populations"
  • "managements problems" - Remove the "s" after "management". - Not yet done
  • "and the planned construction" - Not yet done
  • "which later developed ininto the regional capital". Also add a comma after "capital".
  • "fishing community and are according to the tradition home" add commas after "are" and "tradition".
  • See if there is there a good wikilink for "Ndoek-Daour"?
  • One of the refs is missing its archive link.
Please ping me when you are done with these. -MPGuy2824 (talk) 03:23, 20 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done, thanks! I am still not happy with linking crocodile, because it is too general. And no good idea about Ndoek-Daour, I checked some religion articles but no direct mentions. Tone 21:47, 21 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Support promotion on prose and table accessibility. -MPGuy2824 (talk) 07:38, 22 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Image review – Pass

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  • Images are relevant and have ALT text for accessibility.
  • Senegal adm location map.svg has an appropriate CC license.
  • La Maison des Esclaves.jpg is an image from Flicr. The license is compatible although the reviewer notes a potential conflict between the published licenses.
  • CormoransDjoudj.JPG has an appropriate PD license.
  • UNESCO Niokolo-Koba National Park Senegal (3687354820).jpg is reviewed and has an appropriate CC license.
  • Saintlouis ile pecheur.jpg has an appropriate GNU CC license.
  • Stone circles Sine Ngayène TP10.jpg has an appropriate CC license.
  • Saloum.gif has an appropriate PD license.
  • BedikVillage.jpg is reviewed and has an appropriate CC license.
  • Lignes Aeriennes Latécoére (Latécoére-Toulouse).jpg has an appropriate GNU CC license.
  • Carabane-Church1.JPG and Enampor-Impluvium1.JPG have appropriate PD licenses.
  • Îles de la Madeleine, Dakar.jpg, Fort de podor.jpg, RetbaLakeShore.jpg and RufisqueQuincaillerie.JPG have appropriate GNU CC licenses.

@Tone: Excellent work. Happy to support. simongraham (talk) 10:25, 21 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Airship

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  • Labels to identify individual blue and yellow dots in the lead image would be nice.
    • Agreed, I would have done that if there were individual articles available, but here they are just sites.
  • Would it be possible to go into more detail on UNESCO's ten criteria?
    • That would be too much, that's why there is a link with the full explanations.
  • "The architecture of the island reflects the mixture of influences, with elegant houses of slave traders, fortifications, and warehouses where slaves were kept." this is oddly phrased: the first comma grammatically implies that the houses, fortifications, and warehouses were the influences on architecture. Would suggest "The architecture of the island, consisting of elegant houses of slave traders, fortifications, and warehouses where slaves were kept, reflects the mixture of influences" or similar.
  • Would be worth noting whether the House of Slaves was a slave trader house or a warehouse.
    • I rewrote it in a way that it should be clearer that the slaves were kept at the House of Slaves.
  • I suggest "(pictured)" instead of "(pictured)"—looks better.
    • I considered it often is these lists but since I am sometimes using (x is pictured), this would ruin the consistency.
  • "Societies, who engaged with fishing and shellfish gathering" clumsy, I suggest "societies who fished and gathered shellfish" or similar.
    • Modified.
  • "This resulted in a specific cultural landscape," as opposed to ... a non-specific one?
    • Well, there is an explanation later in the sentence what is specific about it :)
  • "People living in this remote area between the 11th and 19th centuries have created" also a little clumsy, and the imperfect tense is not suitable. Suggest instead "Inhabitants of this remote area between the 11th and 19th centuries created..."

Good otherwise. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 14:16, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@AirshipJungleman29: I am through, thanks! Comments above inline. --Tone 10:01, 4 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hey man im josh

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Source review: Passed

  • Reliable enough for the information being cited
  • Consistent date formatting
  • Consistent and proper reference formatting
  • Appropriate wikilinks where applicable
  • Spot checks on 15 sources match what they are being cited for

I found no issues, support. Hey man im josh (talk) 18:57, 9 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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