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The list was promoted by The Rambling Man 13:57, 8 June 2012 [1].

Rihanna videography

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Nominator(s): — Tomica (talk) 17:14, 5 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because... I think it satisfies the FL criteria. Previously it was part of Rihanna discography. I re-created as a separate page and fully wrote it. Also my fellow friend User:Wikipedian Penguin helped a lot with the tables and made them have excellent access. I would be grateful If everybody who opposes also adds comments how I can further improve the list. Thanks — Tomica (talk) 17:14, 5 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Lemonade51 (talk) 16:12, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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  • Under 'television commericals', I seem to recall Rihanna starred in an advert for NRJ Radio, which I saw a while ago in France. Bit like the Capital FM one. Managed to track the advert for evidence, so you need to find a reliable source. Likewise, she appeared in a Renault Clio ad, which I'm guessing was aired across Europe.
  • I can't find reliable sources to add them. Btw that is an award commercial, aired for limited time, and the Renault Clio one it does not really features Rihanna. Only a frame of her music video and the line "Feels so good being bad". — Tomica (talk) 19:50, 7 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In 2011, three of Rihanna's videos has met with criticism and controversy." → has is redundant and can be removed.
  • "In September 2011, Rihanna released "We Found Love", lead single from her sixth studio album Talk That Talk whose caused controversy from some activist groups", put 'the' between comma and lead single. Place comma between album and 'Talk That Talk'.
  • Missing a quotation mark on Rockstar 101
  • Be consistent with the date format for refs. Is it 2008-07-01 or July 1, 2008?
  • Is Rap-Up considered to be a WP:RELIABLE? If so, be sure to add a hyphen in its title on Ref 108.
  • For Ref 82, BBC News is the publisher, BBC is the work. Be sure to use 'cite news' template for news sources.

-- Lemonade51 (talk) 23:27, 5 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 07:24, 24 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments (quick ones)
  • Lead image doesn't need a period in the caption as it's an incomplete sentence.
  • " dance-sequences." is that really hyphenated?
  • "with her lover and husband" add an extra "her" before husband to make it 100% clear you're talking about two different people.
  • "who later became her regular collaborator" repeat of "collaborate" is boring here.
  • "Rihanna starred in her first movie" "starred" or simply "played herself in..."? Try to keep it neutral in tone.
  • "For the album, she changed her image and style." as a standalone sentence, this is unhelpful, as I don't know what about her image or style she changed from or to...
  • "to shoot them in Prague, the Czech Republic" don't see a need to say ", the Czech Republic" as Prague is pretty self-explanatory.
  • "the dark-theme inspired" don't understand this at all.
  • In sortable tables, anything that's linked should be linked every time because after sorting, there's no guarantee the first linked item will list first.
  • "she puts on herself a pair of jeans" don't get this. Suggest a quick copyedit from native English speaker.
  • Avoid SHOUTING in the refs (e.g. QUICK CLIP).

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:28, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Giants2008 (Talk) 19:11, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments –
  • If I Never See Your Face Again: Don't see the point of the last word in the description. Having "the late-1970s or early-1980s situation" doesn't work well.
  • We have "love–hate relationship" in the lead and "love-hate relationship" in the We Found Love description. I think the latter is correct stylistically, but they need to be consistent either way.
  • Video albums: In the Album details column, there is what appears to be an extra line on the left side of the row. It's worth checking the formatting to see if an excess pipe is causing this.
  • Looked at it and can't figure out what's going on myself. Then again, I'm not familiar with the formatting of discography-type articles. Maybe one of FLC's music regulars has an idea? Giants2008 (Talk) 16:12, 29 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Television commercials: "an garden" → "a garden" in Reb'l Fleur.
  • About.com (ref 42) isn't usually a reliable source. Why should it be considered one here?
Resolved comments from Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:36, 4 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from Crisco 1492
"dark-theme" - What exactly is a "dark theme"?
Removed it since there were also complaints from other users. — Tomica (talk) 23:39, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The Matsoukas " - Who's the other one?
"Hard", "Rude Boy" and "Rockstar 101" already mentioned in the body of the lead. — Tomica (talk) 23:39, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ah, so not the Matsoukas family. You should have "The Matsoukas-directed music video for "S&M" (Loud, 2010)", as Matsoukas is used as an adjective.
If we're going to have plot outlines of the music videos, we should have one for each. You can cite the video itself, can't you?
That are not plotes, rather a rough description. And some of the videos (or alternative versions) aren't uploaded on Rihanna's official channel. — Tomica (talk) 23:39, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Fair enough.
Perhaps link cabaret
Linked.— Tomica (talk) 23:39, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"A post-apocalyptic inspired video shot in Queens, New York." is not a full sentence. The other blurbs are all full sentences.
Re-worded. — Tomica (talk) 23:46, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"while sitting on a table," - Just to double check, on and not at, right?
Ooops. Done. — Tomica (talk) 23:39, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Just thought I'd double check. Who knows these days, a music video could have a singer sitting or dancing on a table.
"nominated for an Emmy Award for Best Original Music and Lyrics." - I do think Shy Ronnie may be notable enough for a redlink.
Want me to link Shy Ronnie even though there is no article? — Tomica (talk) 23:39, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sounds good. I expect you, Calvin/Aaron, and the other project members will have no problem making an article. An Emmy nomination sounds like certain notability to me.
"various 1990s dancehall dance moves" - Any way to avoid repeating "dance"?
C/e it. — Tomica (talk) 23:39, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Two versions of the video were released for a Doritos campaign, titled day and night version" - If the title is Day Version and Night Version, you should have capitals. If not, I'm not sure the singular "version" is correct.
Capital letters used now. — Tomica (talk) 23:39, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Are the names Day Version and Night Version, or Day and Night? If the latter, just cut "version" as you have the word earlier in the sentence.
"played by British model Dudley O'Shaughnessy." - Should be referenced
Referenced. — Tomica (talk) 23:39, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Lots of sentence fragments in #Television commercials
C/e by Status. — Tomica (talk) 23:46, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Not too much. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:22, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]


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