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Bradford Island

I've listed this article for peer review because it's been at DYK and passed as a GA, and I'd like to nominate it as a featured article candidate. I've never nominated anything for FA before, nor have I undergone a peer review, so I guess I'll learn a bunch from this.

Thanks, jp×g 02:44, 13 June 2021 (UTC)

Comments from Spicy

Some quick comments. I haven't looked at this in depth.

• Image formatting needs work, currently all the images are clustered on the right below the infobox. It will be hard to avoid sandwiching in a short article like this. Does File:Shiloh_Wind_Power_Plant_aerial_(cropped_to_Bradford_Island_and_Webb_Tract).jpg really add any value to the article when there is a higher quality aerial shot in the infobox? I'd suggest removing that one and using {{Multiple image}} to display the two USGS maps together.
  • You could create Commons:Category:Bradford Island and use {{Commonscat}} to link to additional images in the external links section. Commons also has File:Bradford_Island_shellmound.jpg.
• All images should have alt text. "An aerial photo of a happy yet embattled little island" is charming but I'm not sure it meets the criteria at Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style/Accessibility/Alternative_text_for_images#How_to_write_alternative_text.
• What makes RecordNet and FireFighting News high-quality reliable sources?
• Maybe this is unavoidable, but this ref doesn't render properly in OpenOffice; I just get a garbled mess
• WRT the FA 'comprehensiveness' criterion, I find it concerning that most references are from freely accessible, recently published online sources. Have you consulted newspaper archives, local libraries, etc?
• The history section seems thin. Is there any information on when settlement of the island began? The extensive material about the USS Lucid seems undue especially considering the museum that now houses it isn't located on the island.
• Is the table of yearly revenues necessary? See WP:INDISCRIMINATE. If this is kept, ensure it complies with table accessibility guidelines and MOS:DONTHIDE.
• Earwig picks up one instance of close paraphrasing:
  • Article: successfully petitioned the district to expand its board from three to five members; he and his girlfriend were elected to the additional seats.
  • Source: successfully petitioned the district to expand the board from three to five members — after which he and his girlfriend were elected to the new seats.
• Please review for more. Earwig doesn't do well with pdf/docx sources.

Thanks, Spicy (talk) 17:12, 13 June 2021 (UTC)

I thought I'd watchlisted this page, but it seems I didn't, so apologies for the late response. I appreciate that you have pointed out stuff I'd never thought of -- I'll go through it in a bit and address the points individually. Obviously, some will require more effort than others. But I'll tell you right off the bat, that image alt is stupid and the Word document is jacked up (I had the same problem, there were formatting issues that required me to move a bunch of boxes around and adjust font sizes to even figure out what they said). On the talk page for the article I've started pulling together some more sources that give a better idea of the history, although I fear an irl voyage may be necessary to close some of the gaps. Thanks for swinging by! jp×g 12:43, 16 June 2021 (UTC)

Update: I have managed to find a wealth of sources on the earlier history of the island (the early establishment of levees in the late 1800s, its existence and settlement prior to levees, et cetera). There remains a gap but I will work to fill it. jp×g 14:38, 16 June 2021 (UTC)

Filling it in slowly (I have a whole lot more to put in), but it's a start. jp×g 07:09, 17 June 2021 (UTC)

Three days ago it was a start, now it's a middle. jp×g 08:04, 20 June 2021 (UTC)

I didn't forget, but I did get sidetracked. jp×g 08:45, 18 July 2021 (UTC)

No longer sidetracked. Expanding with my newly obtained newspaper archive access. Currently up to the 1980s. jp×g 06:33, 18 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments Femke

• With a island under sea level, I'm surprised the levee paragraph does not mention sea level rise. This expert blog indicates there is some research published on the topic: https://californiawaterblog.com/2011/03/09/sea-level-rise-and-delta-subsidence%E2%80%94the-demise-of-subsided-delta-islands/.
• Per WP:PRICE, I think some details about pricing may have to be removed. The ferry is now 7.75.
• The history and levee sections have some elements of WP:Proseline. I'm not a prose expert, but you may want to vary the sentence structure a bit more.
• for whom Roberts Island is named -> after whom??
• FN27 needs more biographical details (author, work), FN32, FN42 need work. FN29 is bare link.
• Another fire, in October 2015, was similarly not responded to by firefighting agencies -> active tense better?
• District Manager -> I wouldn't put these in caps. If the job title changes, but the job remains, this would be wrong, right? Same with trustee, which is inconsistently capitalised.
• He then amended its bylaws to -> I assume the board as a whole did this? FemkeMilene (talk) 19:35, 25 July 2021 (UTC)

@JPxG: to ensure they saw the above comments. Z1720 (talk) 12:16, 6 October 2021 (UTC)

• I am closing this PR because the nominator has not responded to the above comments. They are invited to open a new PR at a later date when the above concerns have been considered. Z1720 (talk) 17:09, 21 October 2021 (UTC)