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I've listed this article for peer review because I am wanting to work on the article enough to the point where I can get a DYK. What I'm wanting to get out of this peer review is some ideas how I can improve the article.
Thanks, ― Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#6545 16:25, 31 January 2022 (UTC)
- The development section is almost entirely about the DLC. DLC should be it’s own section, especially since this game has so much. Keep the table, though. Sultan the Sultan (talk) 15:49, 21 February 2022 (UTC)
- Alright. I'll see what I can find about the actual development of the game. I created the table to condense the info down into a more easily readable format. ― Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#6545 15:51, 21 February 2022 (UTC)
Comments by Guyinblack25
editKudos to you for taking the initiative on the article. Here are some general recommendations to improve the article's quality.
- Image caption - some more details for the layman would be helpful. Explain any HUD and other on screen elements to give some context.
- Organization
- There are many paragraphs that are too short to stand on their own. I would combine them with related sentences/paragraphs to improve content flow and give better context to these orphan sentences/ideas.
- Rename DLC to "Downloadable content" per MOS:JARGON. Done
- The DLC section has too many subsections with small paragraphs. As a result, this section reads more like a catalog than an encyclopedia, which would hurt the article at a quality review like GA or FA. I would remove all subsection headings and combine/summarize everything into prose. It would remove the undue weight and convey the same general ideas.
- I would combine the Awards into the Reception section. Template:Video game reviews also has parameters for awards. Since there is only one sentence, it also makes sense to combine the content. Done
- If possible, I recommend finding more content for:
- Development - it currently reads more like a "Release" section, which is fine but more details about the actual creation would go a long way.
- Reception - more than two reviews would be better. The content in this article has to be in English but foreign language reviews are also acceptable as long as it is a reliable source. Doing...
- Sources (I didn't do an in depth review for verifiability or reliability)
- Formatting - make sure all citations have the necessary information
- Consider archiving the sources Help:Archiving_a_source Done
The article is making progress. Keep up the good work. (Guyinblack25 talk 23:15, 22 February 2022 (UTC))
- @Guyinblack25: Thanks! I'll work on that. Some of the sources regarding the DLC are primary sources because there just aren't that many secondary sources regarding them. I feel that at least the map DLC should be kept since it's kinda of a main part of the game. ― Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#6545 23:21, 22 February 2022 (UTC)
- Would you possibly know how to create a map like the one currently used in the article? The user who maintains it isn't nearly as active as I would hope they'd be and I'd like to update it when it needs to be updated. ― Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#6545 02:20, 23 February 2022 (UTC)
- Regarding your follow up and points:
- DLC - I wouldn't remove it completely. I think a short summary of the type of content and range when it was all released would be helpful. Primary sources are fine. An article just can't be supported solely on them and you have third party sources.
- I think the same approach (short summary) could be applied to the map expansion packs.
- Hope this helps. (Guyinblack25 talk 18:49, 25 February 2022 (UTC))
- @Guyinblack25: Ah alright. I'm not removing it completely, I've simply moved it into my sandbox for the time being while I work on it. ― Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#6545 19:16, 25 February 2022 (UTC)
- Regarding your follow up and points: