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Impossible Princess

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Over the past couple of years, there has been a significant change within this article's grammar, punctuation, referencing, etc. This article is the sixth studio album by Kylie Minogue, whom I am a fan of and heavily dedicated to this (personal matters aside...). I have already achieved several GA with the corresponding singles, remix albums, and other releases from this album, and this article, to, is registered as a GA. However, since its change when it had achieved GA status, more facts and information started to flourish and it has slightly changed the article, for better and for worse. I am wanting to nominate it for FA, but first I need help in correcting any errors, grammar errors, spelling, formatting, etc. as much as possibly so I can achieve this. I would appreciate any comments below, soft or constructive, so I can improve it towards my goal (I do my editing and sight-seeing real quick, so once there's a comment, they'll bound to be a change). Thank you and ping me for each comment!

Thanks, CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 02:29, 22 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

at producing and composing — "in production and composition"
polarized reactions — "a polarized response"
the sound and experimentation was commended — "the sound and experimentation were commended"
the public, whom were — "the public, which was" (collective nouns read better this way)
prompt further tabloid exploitation on Minogue and the album's behalf — "prompted further tabloid exploitation of Minogue and the album"
released from the album — "released off the album"
all which experienced — "all of which experienced"
Since the albums release — "Since the album's release"
as her lowest point of her career — "as the lowest point of her career"

Background and development

she took partial control over the project — "she took over partial control of the project"
music critics, many whom — "music critics, many of whom"
her move to dance music, and her development in maturity — "her move into dance music, and development in maturity"
according to Cave, he was interested — "according to Cave, he became interested"
In an interview for British magazine NME, she wanted to — "In an interview for British magazine NME, Minogue explained she wanted to"
the first track, which later remained unreleased, "You're the One" — "the first track, "You're the One", which later went unreleased"
recorded during one take — "recorded in one take"
that majority of the content — "that a majority of the content"
did not attend majority of — "did not attend a majority of"
the sickness of the labels head — "the sickness of the label's head director"
Because of this, Minogue took partial control over the project — "Because of this, Minogue took over partial control of the project"
the albums production phases — "the album's production phases"
the albums tracks — "of the album's tracks"

Composition

all whom influenced Minogue during — "all of which influenced Minogue in"
material on Impossible Princess were — "material on Impossible Princess was"
which resulted into — "which resulted in"
Marcel Anders felt majority of — "Marcel Anders felt a majority of"
writer Bence Illés, he wrote that — "writer Bence Illés wrote that"
Vocally, Cinquemani compared the singer's vocals to American singer — "Cinquemani compared Minogue's vocals to those of American singer"

Songs

Featuring "chaotic" arrangement — "Featuring a "chaotic" arrangement"
The Ages John Mangan — "The Age's John Mangan"
musical elements of Middle Eastern music — "elements of Middle Eastern music"
Britian — "Britain"
her relationship with her boyfriend — "the relationship with her boyfriend"
her career, and her personal choices — "her career and personal choices"
Written in Spain, "Limbo"'s sound — "Written in Spain, the sound of "Limbo""
compared to Bjork's single "Venus as a Boy", according to Cinquemani and R. Smith — "compared to Bjork's single "Venus as a Boy" by Cinquemani and R. Smith"

Titling and artworks

Titling and artworks — "Titles and artwork"
whom he had given it to one of her friends — "whom had given it to one of her friends"
the albums recording process — "the album's recording process"
to re-titled the album — "that the album be retitled"

Release

Minogue, discussing about the delays — "Minogue, discussing the delays"
but was postponed to May — "but it was postponed to May"
but was postponed again — "but the album was postponed again"
Consider removing the link for death of Diana, Princess of Wales as it was cited in the previous subsection
August–September 1997 — "August 1997" (Spencer died on 31 August 1997)
which was manufacture in Australia — "which was manufactured in Australia"
Consider removing the repeated wikilink to Compact Cassette as well

Singles

issued in the UK and United States — "issued in the UK and US" (consistency)

Critical response

Upon the albums release, it received polarized responses — "Upon release, it received a polarized response"
According to British author Sean Baker, whom wrote a biography detailing Minogue's life and career, he noticed that — "British author Sean Baker, who wrote a biography detailing Minogue's life and career, noticed that"
Willmott furthered wrote — "Willmott wrote"
new musical genres into the album, all that were outside of her previous work — "new musical genres into the album that were disparate from her previous work"
the production and repetitious nature — "the production and the album's repetitious nature"
Add italics to Who's mention of the title
Impossible Princess range of styles — "Impossible Princess' range of styles"
Awarding to four stars — "Awarding four stars"
the materials lack of — "the material's lack of"
he concluded "Brave — "he concluded, "Brave" (punctuation)

Commercial performance

minor impact on there record charts — "minor impact on the record charts"
it's final charting position — "its final charting position"
which has been recognized by British publications — "which led British publications to recognize it"
was noted by the lack of promtoional activity — "was noted for the lack of promotional activity"
titling changes — "title changes"
After a year of its release, UK Virgin Radio mocked the sales of the album — "After a year of release, UK Virgin Radio mocked the album sales"

Promotion and live performance

album was "selling better well" in Australia — "album was "selling better" in Australia"
didn't perform — "did not perform"

Impact

Since the albums release — "Since the album's release"
but lost to Unit by Regurgitator respectively — "but lost to Unit by Regurgitator"
Minogue was nominated was nominated — "Minogue was nominated"
her key re-inventions of her career — "the key re-inventions of her career"
from her fan base during its initial release, whom did not appreciate — "during its initial release from her fan base, whom did not appreciate"
according to Michael R. Smith from Daily Vault, he believed — "Michael R. Smith from Daily Vault believed"
were not present majority of the time to access the record, nor promote it properly — "were not present a majority of the time to access the record or promote it properly"
and has since resulted as her — "and has since become her"
positive critiques — "positive critique"
according to The Guardian's Tim Jonze, he felt the latter release saved her career — "according to The Guardian's Tim Jonze, the latter release saved her career"
her most misunderstood album in her career — "the most misunderstood album in her career"
Add italics to the two mentions of Impossible Princess 2
she may fear it "it would be — "she may fear it "would be"
it didn't exactly sell truckloads of album! — "it didn't exactly sell truckloads of albums!"

Other additional releases

Other additional releases — "Additional releases" ("other" and "additional" are synonyms)

Ping! @CaliforniaDreamsFan:
Cognissonance (talk) 18:51, 12 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Cognissonance: My sincere apologize for the late reply; I have done all these adjustments as requested above

CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 04:01, 20 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]