Wikipedia:Peer review/Independence Hall (United States)/archive1

This is an important article and could use peer review. Thanks! --South Philly 04:12, 20 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ _t 15:26, 21 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]
- I did some of the clean-up. It probably needs to be bulked up with refenced work. --evrik 20:04, 21 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

A few comments:-

Article is currently suffering badly from a lack of content. The history section is only 3 sentences long. Significance is only 2 and Today is only 1. Needs to be much much more.
Use [[Wikipedia:Summary style)) to perhaps give a concise description of the Second continental congress, declaration of independence and the constitution so that the article could be read by someone without a working knowledge of American history. Don't go overboard and always relate back to the building.
Perhaps a quick summary sentence as to the significance of the Liberty Bell for us non-U.S. people (Oh it's the one with the cracka and the rivet!, I remember now)?
Suggest sections on Architeture (Or Building). Who built the clock?
The gallery pics are nice but would be better served to illustrate the text.
Today section - Change to Recent History - I'd be inclined to include some of the protest anecdotes from the website you cite. Communist bums! Vietnam etc. etc. the building is a focus and distills american history as a venue for protest.
Has the building ever been altered, extended, refurbished, remodelled? When, By whom, in what way, why etc.etc.?