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I'd like to know what it would take this page up to featured list status, other than creating articles for the notable singles/EPs that are still redlinked.
Thanks, Prosperosity (talk) 22:38, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments: The list seems informative, but there are numerous points of presentation to be addressed:-
- What is an "EP"?
- Replaced all mentions with extended play, plus linking to the extended play article.--Prosperosity (talk) 07:05, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
- Parentheses closure after "Victor Entertainment" no opening.
- Fixed.--Prosperosity (talk) 07:05, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
- "...notably "Inori/Justice" for Ayahi Takagaki comes across Feldt Grace, a character single for Mobile Suit Gundam 00." I can't work out what this means.
- Reworded to make clearer.--Prosperosity (talk) 07:05, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
- "Kokia has found moderate success for her releases." This sounds like a judgement - whose?
- I'm not sure if this is an issue, as this is a lead in sentence about what level of commercial success her releases have (backed up by the RIAJ and Oricon).--Prosperosity (talk) 07:05, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
- Shouldn't the tables be in presented in the same order as introduced in the first line: "11 studio albums, five EPs, three compilations albums and 25 singles"?
- Fixed.--Prosperosity (talk) 07:05, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
- Why is the DVD list fomatted differently?
- Fixed.--Prosperosity (talk) 07:05, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
- Music videos: the explanatory text before the table is not cited anywhere.
- Fixed.--Prosperosity (talk) 07:05, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
- What are "B-sides"?
- Added an explanatory note.--Prosperosity (talk) 07:05, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
- I'm not sure I understand "Songwriting appearances". What is the "appearance" element here?
- Replaced with "credits".--Prosperosity (talk) 07:05, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
- Hyphens used in date ranges e.g. "2002-3". En-dash required, thus: "2002–3". There are multiple misuses of hyphens in the Song tie-ups section. For example, (first line) Brain Powerd (1998) - "Ai no Field" should read Brain Powerd (1998): "Ai no Field". Subsequent lines should be amended.
- Fixed.--Prosperosity (talk) 07:05, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
- What is the rationale for the sequencing in the Song tie-up sections? Why are they not chronological?
- Changed to chronological.--Prosperosity (talk) 07:05, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
- What is an "EP"?
As I am unable to watch peer reviews at present, please use my talkpage to contact me if you wish to raise points from this review. Brianboulton (talk) 11:52, 26 May 2010 (UTC)