Wikipedia:Peer review/Lakitu/archive1

Lakitu

Article seems pretty good as it is, but it could do for improvements. - A Link to the Past (talk) 04:50, August 21, 2005 (UTC)

Redwolf24's Review

I, Redwolf24, will be working on this peer review. Strike out things once changed please.

Could use more links in lead-in paragraph. Link to turtle.

*Perhaps lengthen the lead-in. * He rides on a cloud and throws Spinies, turtle-like creatures with spiked shells, at Mario (or Luigi for the second player), the game's protagonist <---change to throws spinies at the game's protagonist, Mario (or Luigi for the second player). Sounds less choppy IMO.

I disagree with the deletion of the definition of "Spinies". Wikipedia articles on game-related subjects often forget that not everyone who accesses an article will be familiar with the subject. In other words, it's important to remember the uninitiated. BrianSmithson 11:32, 22 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Oh no that wasn't my intent. My intent was to change the wording with Mario and Protagonist. I just didn't retype it to make this PR quick. I mentioned it in the IRC room to Link too. Redwolf24 20:00, 22 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]

*Thumbnail the Mario Kart images and make them a bit smaller. Also, maybe add a pic of MarioKart64?

~~How about an image of the first fishing lakitu?~~
Otherwise looking great.
One more thing, write the pronounciation in the first paragraph. Redwolf24 01:44, 23 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]

See the Talk page. I don't think the English pronunciation is known. I could try to write Nintendo, though. BrianSmithson 13:42, 1 September 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Rob Church's Review

I, Rob Church, will be adding my peer review below also. As for Redwolf24, please strike out anything I raise should you address it.

I agree, the leader needs more wikilinks and these should be distributed evenly throughout that text.

Done.

Consider changing "as neither friend nor foe to" to "as neutral to", in the leader text.

Done.

In which of the games was "Mario's quest to save Princess Peach and retrieve the 120 Power Stars"? This isn't made sufficiently clear.

Done.

Consider splitting Characteristics into subsections Appearance, Attacks and Defense and move the content about accordingly.

Idunno. The sections would become awfully short if we did this.

Other comments

Can someone take a screenshot of a Lakitu from one of the Paper Mario games? I think it'd be better than the Super Mario RPG image that is currently there. BrianSmithson 23:55, 22 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]
We need to provide fair use rationale for the images we've included.BrianSmithson 20:22, 24 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Done. BrianSmithson 13:42, 1 September 2005 (UTC)[reply]