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This article is being peer reviewed per featured topic criteria 3c. Thanks, -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 01:30, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

  • This precludes any other comments: does this topic even deserve an article? I know it's for the featured topic, but the article seems like content-forking to the extreme.
I asked rst20xx if content-forking is needed to make a topic featured, and I think he said yes... the discussion is somewhere in here... -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 02:31, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I couldn't find the discussion, but we'll cross that bridge when we come to it. Dabomb87 (talk) 02:36, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Here it is. You were in the discussion! LOL. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 21:14, 9 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • The image needs alt text.
Done. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 02:31, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The Bobcats play "-->They play
Done. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 02:31, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The team began playing in 2004 as an expansion team. The Bobcats play their home games at the Time Warner Cable Arena, formerly known as the Charlotte Bobcats Arena, since 2005."-->The Bobcats began playing in 2004 as an expansion team, and have played their home games at the Time Warner Cable Arena, formerly known as the Charlotte Bobcats Arena, since 2005.
Directly copied. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 02:31, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "with Rod Higgins is their general manager." "with"-->and
Done. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 02:31, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "three complete seasons." "complete" is unnecessary.
Fixed. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 02:31, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "winning percentage with .391"-->winning percentage (.391)
Done. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 02:31, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In the Bobcats' franchise history, they have never advanced into the playoffs.["-->The Bobcats have never advanced into the playoffs.
Done. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 02:31, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Larry Brown is the only Bobcats' coach to be elected"-->Larry Brown is the only Bobcats' coach to have been elected
Done. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 02:31, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Vincent have spent "-->Vincent has spent
Done. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 02:31, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Aside from my first comment and the list comments, everything else looks OK. Dabomb87 (talk) 02:02, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comment I added a link to List of members of the Basketball Hall of Fame (coaches) in the key; how does it look? I think I might change all NBA head coaches lists to be like this now that we have that article. Dabomb87 (talk) 02:40, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sure, why not. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 02:47, 6 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

A pretty nice list, given that's there's not much to write, but here's a few things to fix:

  • The second paragraph talks about Brown, then jumps back to Vincent then back to Brown again.
Fixed. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 21:14, 9 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'd move the playoff note to somewhere where it creates a better flow, perhaps combining it with the note that they're the newest team in the earlier paragraph.
Done. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 21:14, 9 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • To beef the article up, adding where Bickerstaff and Brown had coached just before their Bobcats tenure began may help.
If I were to add that in, wouldn't the sentence be unrelated to the article? -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 21:14, 9 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hope this helps. Wizardman 20:31, 9 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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