Wikipedia:Peer review/Samurai Jack/archive2

Previous peer review

I've listed this article for peer review because I believe it to be a sufficient candidate for Good Article status, but I still have doubts. Feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thank you.

Thanks, — Paper Luigi TC 01:41, 26 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Morgan695

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I've never watched this series, so hopefully I can provide an outsider's perspective. Overall I think this article easily meets GA standards; though it is not without issues, I think they could be easily resolved as part of the GA process. Morgan695 (talk) 02:18, 15 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • In the note in the opening paragraph, it's confusing that you mention "Aku" without first establishing who Aku is. I would move this note to the plot section.
Changed as requested. — Paper Luigi TC 22:15, 17 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Samurai Jack was inspired by Tartakovsky's enjoyment of... would suggest rephrasing this to "Samurai Jack was inspired by Kung Fu, the 1972 televised drama starring David Carradine, and Tartakovsky's fascination with samurai culture.", as I initially thought you were referring to kung fu as a concept/discipline and not the series.
Changed as requested. — Paper Luigi TC 22:14, 17 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Originally, before Jack could finish him off, Aku sent the samurai forward in time to a dystopian future ruled by the tyrannical shape-shifting demon This is confusing because you haven't established that Aku is a shape-shifting demon; "before Jack could finish him off" is also somewhat informal language
Changed and rewritten. — Paper Luigi TC 22:14, 17 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • (Sab Shimono and Keone Young) Was the character voiced by two different actors, or did the character change voice actors mid-series? Should be clarified in either case.
Added detail for clarification. — Paper Luigi TC 22:14, 17 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • I don't think "Production" needs to be rendered with subheads, as each part is only a paragraph long
Subheads removed. — Paper Luigi TC 22:14, 17 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The Complete Series Region B release date needs a cite
Added. — Paper Luigi TC 22:14, 17 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Both the second and third paragraphs of "Video games" are uncited
Removed third paragraph and cited second paragraph. — Paper Luigi TC 22:14, 17 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]