Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Tosa-class battleship/archive1

Nagato class - what's with the wonky linking?

Some editor's been going around converting ship templates into regular links and occasionally messing things up. I didn't notice this amidst the flood of other changes that he'd been making.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)

eight modern battleships and eight modern armored cruisers - why the repetition of modern?

Good catch, fixed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)

IJN had considered --> what's with "had"? Also, that's not a policy, it's a consideration (check the second clause here)

Rephrased.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)

American President Woodrow Wilson announced plans for ten additional battleships and six battlecruisers, - Clarify that this was for the American Navy, perhaps?

Why would he announced a building program for any other country?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)

Navy Minister - got a good target for this?

Added.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)

Way too many sentences beginning with "They"

Agreed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)

Curtis - have a link?

No.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)

Kampon - Link?

Done.

quick-firing (QF) QF 12-pounder guns - Why repeat QF?

No good reason.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)

The guns / These guns comes across as rather repetitious

Hopefully I've broken it up a bit.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)

splinter bulkheads intended to contain any shell fragments and splinters - any way to avoid saying "splinter" twice?

Done.

The middle deck was the primary armored deck - Any way to avoid repetition?

I couldn't think of one.

in theory, this allowed planes to take off directly from the hangars while other planes landed on the top. - Which begs the question, how did they work in practice?

Added a sentence to explain the issue.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)

Duplicate links: Mutsu, casemates aft,waterline armored belt, deck armor. In an article this short there is no use for duplicate links.

Agreed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)

Otherwise quite good. Do y'all need an image check? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:13, 20 July 2013 (UTC)

Yes, please. Thanks for your review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:42, 20 July 2013 (UTC)