Talk:Aaron Hertzman/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: BeanieFan11 (talk · contribs) 19:16, 23 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 20:37, 23 August 2024 (UTC)

Will review this soon. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 20:37, 23 August 2024 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• Added GM cat.
• Removed American footbal executives cat. Already in subcats.
• Added WW1 cat.
• Added WWII cat.
• Does he not have a PFR exec profile? I couldn't find anything.
• I was thinking about asking you to expand the lead but I don't really think there's anything else to say that wouldn't be undue weight.
• Do you know what the Radcliffe Company is?

I think that's everything. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 21:51, 23 August 2024 (UTC)

• @WikiOriginal-9: Unsure of what else to add to the lead as well – It seems PFR generally doesn't give profiles to defunct team managers (maybe I should contact them to fix it...). As for the Radcliffe Company, I see mentions of a "Radcliffe Land Company" in Kentucky around that time, but I don't see anything connecting him to it (besides the obit, which only states 'he was secretary of Radcliffe Co.'). Thoughts? BeanieFan11 (talk) 20:06, 26 August 2024 (UTC)

  I made a slight copy edit to the lead. Your responses make sense. That's everything. Passing the article. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 20:13, 26 August 2024 (UTC)

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