Talk:Bob Noel/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: BeanieFan11 (talk · contribs) 22:49, 24 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 22:54, 24 April 2024 (UTC)

I'll review this tomorrow. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 22:54, 24 April 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Comments

• I'm wondering if American football is necessary in the first sentence. Maybe American equipment manager? Would get ride of the consecutive linking and add in his ethnicity.
• Noel attended Central Catholic High School in Wisconsin and while attending there enlisted in World War II at the age of 18. is a bit choppy. Maybe Noel attended Central Catholic High School in Wisconsin; while still in high school, he enlisted in World War II at the age of 18.?
• and a "lot of smaller things" needed by the team for each game --> and a "lot of smaller things" needed for each game
• as well as 30 balls for games --> as well as 30 game balls
• 11 head coaches you could link to List of Green Bay Packers head coaches
• I don't know what in the hell I could've done more."[8] and He served the team faithfully and well for a long time."[13] I think the period needs to go after the quotation mark
• For the image, you need to do a few things: change the link to be the non-Wikimedia Library link. Also, the copyright holder is the Green Bay Press-Gazette (the image caption notes "Press-Gazette Files". Lastly, add a caption to the infobox, something like "Noel working on a helmet in an undated photo". Also, the image needs to be downsized, which the bot will do at some point.
• Spot checks look good. Ref 6, 11 and 14 needs an access date (I typically do them for all citations, but I think you don't; I think thats ok for the Newspaper.com sources, but the others are just live web pages, and thus need access dates).

Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:30, 25 April 2024 (UTC)

• @Gonzo fan2007: I believe I've addressed all your points. Thanks, BeanieFan11 (talk) 18:02, 26 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Nice work, passed! « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:29, 26 April 2024 (UTC)

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