Talk:Federalist No. 8

GA Review

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Nominator: Thebiguglyalien (talk · contribs) 01:57, 1 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: The Blue Rider (talk · contribs) 14:52, 1 May 2024 (UTC)

The Blue Rider, this has been open for a month and a half now. Where are we at on finishing the review? Thebiguglyalien (talk) 02:23, 17 June 2024 (UTC)

You can already start acting on my suggestions. The Blue Rider 23:41, 17 June 2024 (UTC)

The Blue Rider Done, but you didn't answer my question. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 03:52, 18 June 2024 (UTC)

The Blue Rider I've responded to the new points. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 22:22, 25 June 2024 (UTC)

@The Blue Rider, have you done a source check for this review yet? -- asilvering (talk) 00:49, 28 June 2024 (UTC)

I believe other user already did a source check. The Blue Rider 19:27, 28 June 2024 (UTC)

Stability

• Last edit on 1 of May and no edit wars in place; pass.

Image

• Correct copyright tag and suitable caption; pass.

Copyvio

• 3,8%; pass.

Lead

• Everything looks good, I would only suggest to add a sentence or two about the aftermath.
  • Done.

Summary

• Add a note explaining that Publius is a pseudonym used by James Madison, Alexander Hamilton and John Jay.
  • It already says that Publius is the pseudonym used to write the Federalist Papers. A general description of Publius belongs on the main Federalist Papers article.
• How many states existed at the time of writing? Maybe clarify that if relevant.
  • Not sure if it's relevant, the point is that there are several that could come into conflict with one another.
• A standing army for each state? If so clarify that, or put in the plural as you do in the next phrase.
  • Clarified in each case whether it's a national army or state armies.
• Comma after "invaded" and before "which". Likewise, when describing the army of a nation infrequently invaded.
  • Added.

Background and publication

• Here you link standing army but the first instance is in the "Summary" section.
  • Fixed.

Analysis

Standing army

• The correlation is positive or negative?
  • Specified an "increase".
• Why did the modern advancements in industry made it difficult for men to give up their occupations to go to war?
  • Switched to "obligations in industry".
• "Conversely, he acknowledged that this expansion of industry is what allowed advancements in warfare to develop", why is that so?
  • Specified "technological advancements".
• Comma after "describe it".
  • Not sure what this is referring to.

Geographical advantage

• Everything seems good here.

Aftermath

• Is valor referencing virtue ethics? If so a wikilink would be useful. (optional)
  • I don't believe it is.

Source

• Done by 48JCL (see past revisions).

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