Talk:Fred Provo/GA1
Latest comment: 10 months ago by Gonzo fan2007 in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 15:14, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
I'll review this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:14, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
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editwrote in selected Provo athlete of the year
-> "selecting"ultimately committed to the University of Washington. He majored in advertising at the school
-> "Washington, where he majored in advertising."before he was called to serve in World War II.
was he drafted? Or is this a colloquialism? Either way, make it more objective ("before serving in World War II" or something like that)He served in the Battle of the Bulge and parachuted as part of the Normandy landings and was awarded two Purple Hearts after having been wounded in service
replace the first "and" with a comma.- Ref spot check: 3, 8, 12, 13, 16
Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:52, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
- @Gonzo fan2007: Each done. BeanieFan11 (talk) 23:32, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
- Looks good, passing. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:31, 20 October 2023 (UTC)
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