Talk:Hurricane Ignacio (1985)

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 15:58, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

Lead

• Infobox says 130 mph. Did you mean 135?
  • No. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• You could link 'rapidly intensified' to rapid deepening.
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• If you say "As fast as it strengthened," you don't have to say it weakened just as rapidly, because you already state that.
  • Re-wroded. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• "Ignacio was downgraded into a tropical storm while passing south of Hawaii." When?
  • Added. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• "...however, the watch was dropped when Ignacio weakened. However, Ignacio still brought high waves and light rainfall to the islands." You use however twice. You should find an alternative if possible.
  • Better? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

Meteorological history

• "on July 21 1,623 mi (2,612 km)" I think you should add a comma after 21.
  • No, but there should be a while located in here, which I added. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• "Intensifying further west than normal[2]" comma before reference.
  • { Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• "Based on this, the CPHC upgraded Ignacio into hurricane status..." I think into → to
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• "Continuing to rapidly intensify, Hurricane Ignacio moved west-northwest at 10 mph (16 km/h). Ignacio was upgraded into Category 2 status on the Saffir-Simpson Hurricane Scale (SSHS)." I think you could combine the two sentences, and state when Ignacio was upgraded.
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• Link Hurricane Hunter
  • I did already :P YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• "The hurricane held peak intensity for several hours, however, an upper trough northwest of the Hawaiian Islands was gradually approaching Ignacio." If you're starting a new paragraph, a good rule of thumb is to include the time the stated fact happened, regardless of whether or not it was stated at the end of the last.
  • CPHC did not say. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• "a mjaor hurricane" spellcheck
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• "Air Force aircraft" Whose Air Force?
  • Idk. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• "The hurricane resumed its westerly course..." I don't see anywhere else in the MH where a different course was taken or disrupted.
  • If you look at the track map, it did turn WNW for a while. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

• I know but that's just the image. You should state it in the actual prose. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 16:27, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
  • I did, " Hurricane Ignacio moved west-northwest ". YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:30, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

• "While passing south of the island chain..." Since this is in a new paragraph, what island chain?
  • Substituted. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• Can you provide any times for the events stated in the MH?
  • Added a couple. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

Preparations and impact

• "was lcoated northwest..." Spellcheck.
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• "... track then what..." then → than
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• "Bu July 24..." Bu → By
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• I suggest linking high surf advisory to severe weather terminology (United States)#Coastal/Lakeshore Hazards but that's just my opinion.
• "Big Island of Hawaii[2]" Needs period.
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• "the watch was cancelled as Ignacio resumed weakening..." Did it weaken beforehand? Because you use Igancio, and to me it appears Ignacio strengthened and weakened, with not much in between.
  • Read the MH part where it mention slight re-intensification may have occurred. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

• I know, but that was just a 'theory' and its not supported by the database. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 16:27, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
  • HURDAT does say it leveled off in intensity. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:30, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

• "and the Big Island" I don't think you need 'the'
  • It IMO does not make sense without it. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
• "that lead to the beaches" lead → led
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

References and external links

• Would Reference #9 have any link?
  • It's in cite news, so they don't need links! But, I made the title lowercase. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

That's all I have for now. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:58, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

GA Reassessment

Hurricane Ignacio (1985)

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Result: Delisted. Dylan620 (he/him • talk • edits) 21:15, 25 May 2024 (UTC)

This is a procedural delisting, as the article has been merged per consensus at Talk:1985 Pacific hurricane season#Proposed merge of Hurricane Ignacio (1985) into 1985 Pacific hurricane season. Dylan620 (he/him • talk • edits) 21:14, 25 May 2024 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.